Family Search

Well, it was different, that's for sure

Preposterous, but imaginative. One of your poorest writing jobs, but a what a great idea and tremendous creativity. I'll give it a four.

this has got to be a Matt Monroe orignal

why didn't you just have his long lost brother fuck him in the ass. Who gives a fuck what the bio mom thinks, she kept the others and put him up for adoption. Did his mom die or what? And why would I dump a slut on my brother? I must hate the fucker to put him with a whore.

Literary Dual Aubades to 1)Search for Self and 2)Cognitive Dissonance of Maturing Adopted Child

This was a compelling and ambitious theme(s) that imhapless took on in his inimitable style. I think he failed and blew it in terms of what the story could have been , but in an absolutely fascinating way . Why the hell did Janet choose to try to cuckold him with man who was near mirror image ? She wanted to explain, I sure wanted to know but the narrator shut her down . Ouch !

I liked the narrator's ongoing search for blood family, strong stuff. . I have relatives ( not in direct family ) who have put kids up for adopted due to adverse circumstances and in each instance, as years go by, the desire to make contact grew stronger and stronger as the years passed until the courage for face to face meeting was mustered. This author's premises are nearly always nervy and compelling. This one was no exception.

Finding out blood brother had unknowingly cucked narrator was too sensational and unnecessary . Divorcing Janet for cheating and discovering real family could have happened in sequential fashion . Something lost, something gained would have worked so much better. Shackles and chains would have been superfluous with a bit faith in inherent power of dual themes.

I like to close on positive. A wonderful nuance that stood out was the IV on dying adopted mother's hand as narrator kissed it in both thanks and farewell. Is it me ? I really think imhapless takes more trouble with observational details like this. So Megaprops for that tiny but perfect literary jewel. I thank the author for sharing that. Very unexpected and powerful because I pigeonholed him as a rush, rush, rush to 'big finish' storyteller. Glad I was wrong.

@LordSlamdawgg

...Really? You don't know why she went with a man who looked like her husband? You've been around here for a while, you have to have read stories like this before; you should know how it goes.

The main character highlighted the wife's obsessive nature when it comes to getting what she wants. She was obsessed with having a child, and hubby had a low sperm count; never a good combination. It's pretty freakin' clear that the wife went looking for a man who resembled her husband enough that no one would question who the baby's father was. Despite the several instances when the narrator all but calls her a moron, she was at least smart enough to figure out that people would start asking questions if the baby came out with the wrong hair color, or started looking more like the neighbor than her husband as he/she grew up.

From then on Jeremy was her stud in the stable; the moment she wanted another kid she showed up on his doorstep, then disappeared just as fast when she got what she wanted.

THAT'S why he shut her down, just like he should've. It wasn't a case of out of control lust or any of that other bullshit cheaters like to say. There was intent behind what she was doing from day one. She had a goal in mind and went looking for the right man to help her reach it. She lucked out by bagging her hubby's long lost brother; the only way it could've been more perfect for her is if they had been identical twins. But even if it hadn't been him, it would've been some other guy who bore an uncanny resemblance to the husband.

@ systemshock ( respectfully )

Doh me ! I missed the low sperm count paragraph . Apologies to author. Thx 4 hdz up SS.

A good story, a good read, but...

A good story, a good read, but there is an issue in it that I didn't understood quite well: The house was his, even before the marriage, an inheritance. His brother was well settled, with 3 shops, 10 employees, so should have a good house. Why did he have to split the house with her, and that she could live in it until Will (not his son) turns 18? His brother wasn't capable to support his children and support a house for them? Even if didn't want to live there anymore, why not put it in the market right away? and then if he wanted, then give her 50% of the sell money. However 4*

Everything comes together

Very well thought out. His biological family lived in the same county or near by, which narrowed the (otherwise 0) chances of his wife running into his brother.
Typically - while a lot of American enjoy great mobility, some stay in one location for generations.
Altogether a story I enjoyed very much. I also loved the positive ending. Altogether a 5* from me.
Thank you for this and your other stories which you so generously share with us.

Why?

I've noticed this horrible tendency that cheated upon men always go for women who already have children. Is this just so you can skip ahead of actual development and progression of their relationship?

I felt it would have been better if

it ended after he divorced the woman. The fast, simple, convenient, doctor/lover was just too easy and too good.

The most original story ever in LW in my opinion

WOW -- how in the fuck did you come up with this idea? It had so many unusual elements -- I can't believe it's rating is less than 4 -- I guess all the assholes who only want extreme BTB can't recognize originality and only want formulaic shit. 5* in my book.

Only Fair

"I was five that I was adopted” – Are you sure you don’t mean five DAYS?

Ended abruptly. However, as I was trying to guess the twists and turns (and failed for the most part), I remained very engaged in what would happen next.

So that is to the good. I liked the touch about hair length and similar phrases. Hasn't that happened with separated twins as well? So it added a little flavor to the stew.

I do NOT like this guy for being so easy to 'sacrifice' his daughters love. Which is not to say I hated him, but it gave him a black mark in my book. But who among us is perfect?

Still, the ending seemed rushed and chopped.

You Scored Again

I enjoy most of your well rafter,well written stories.......heh no one is perfect especially me!

As others pointed out, this had to be an original storyline in LW. Extra bonus points for the author.

While Janice certainly landed in the briar patch for a twice cheating wife, here husband did discover his lost siblings. Thanks for sharing. Ed

The Question

Well at least it was different. I guess the unanswered question is why he thought it a good idea to dump a woman like Janice on a brother he professed to like.

One thing you missed

Good story and not to be petty, but true brothers would have the same blood type.

No, sibs don't have to have the same blood type

Identical twins will (barring a mutation) have the same blood types. Otherwise, it depends on the parents' blood types. If both parents are genertically O/O, all the children are Os.

But in this story, one sibling expressed as "A" which would be genetically A/A or A/O. His brother expressed as "B," thus genetically B/B or B/O. If the brothers' mother was A/O and dad was B/O, the siblings could easily be genetically A/O and B/O, expressing as "A" and "B". In fact, if the parents are genetically A/O and B/O, a child could be A, B, AB or O.

Of course, in this story both both husband and wife express as "B," genetically B/B or B/O. The daughter expressing as A (A/A or A/O) is not possible.

This is why blood typing for paternity is very coarse. Only under some circumstances -- like this one -- does it become certain who the father cannot be.

Enough biology, a good story.

Good Story

Thanks for sharing.

good read

it was a good read. Interesting about the blood type. I liked the comment about blood type and children. Granted this is a fictional story so a writer can do anything BUT it is always great when it has grains of truth that can shine!
Thank you for sharing
As I think I have somewhat taken from Woodmanone - If you keep writing I will keep reading.

Thanks for the offering.

Smoothly done BTB

The fire was gentle and she was only seared. This was very well done and suggest that the author has joined the A class writers. Thanks for all your effort.

Great story idea !

Forget the experts that think that the blood types and ect. are something to bitch about!! 4* and thanks for the story

So many stories follow a pattern

This one blazes a new and grand trajectory To be a great
Story. What genus lie.among this authors. Work. Hr is far far from hap.less

Chilley

imhapless has been toiling deep in the mines of loving wives to unearth something original. i hoist a glass to him for doing it yet again. cheers!

A bit of a difference....great story!

Really enjoyed this one...the way you handled this so unconventionally...a good read!