Lisa's Hunger Ch. 01

Systech favored this shit, enough said.

Smelly puke...1*

Smelly puke...1* (where are the negative ratings when we need them?)

1*

illiterate cuck shit.

secret lives

and secre.t thoughts and memories. not good and not bad thought process

Just 3 words

Bad, bad, bad!

Hello # 1

Nothing hot about a whore and the disease she will pass on to loved ones.

5+ Always remember

If anomy hates the story it has to be great

What is the matter with these anonymous commenters?

Do they think porn is real life? What are they doing here if not to find escapist smut? And then complain that it is too smutty? Give me a break.

"What are they doing here if not to find escapist smut?"

That's like a soup kitchen cook saying, "What do they expect this shit to taste like, its free!" We don't expect anything in particular, but we hope to appreciate the efforts of a developing talented writer. This was a bizarre cartoon of a woman who somehow lives a life of wanton debauchery and nymphomania, while at the same time fooling her family into thinking she is perfectly chaste and wholesome. And that plot idea is more absurd than a professional soccer player convincing their family that they are quadriplegic. And for this slut to actually relish and celebrate her betrayal and disrespect is hard for most normal adults to stomach. That's all.

But you've come to the right place. Trying to find escapist smut on Literotica is about as hard as finding dross in a pile of mine tailings. Ahh, but every once in a while, we find a gem. This story is dross.

You're welcome to eat it up. Some of us will keep looking.

Just plain bad...

This cum dumpster will be dead soon at this rate.....

Wow! No Need to Hold Back Guys!

Talk about being blasted out of the water! Either my first chapter REALLY sucked or I touched some nerves in some anonymous people. This was meant to be purely an erotic fantasy ... to entertain and titillate. If it did not achieve that for you, my apologies. Are Lisa's actions responsible behaviour? Would I like my wife to behave like this? Of course not. But it's fun for some of us to play in our erotic imaginations. That was the intent. With the exception of Marcia, I think most were generally put off by Chapter 1. Suppose I should keep my day job and leave Chapter 2 in my twisted imagination. LOL.

-1

Even in fantasy this wasn't erotic, more like the ravings of a pervert.
To anonymous 5+ aka needyou200 formerly bonnietaylor2 I bet you wish you were that slut porn star described in this story. Your hubby must enjoy the cream pies you bring home. Eh?

Ignore the Downvote Brigade

Lit really needs to do something about the comments on LW stories. I liked it, and I hope you do write Ch 2.

I thought it was a hot fantasy. Would have loved a bit more length generally and in the sex, but overall a good story. Don't let the trolls keep you down.

What Lit needs to do

Is get rid of the anti literary comments that foster bad stories by giving inflated scores and encouraging lousy writers

No question.

You said "Either my first chapter REALLY sucked or I touched some nerves"
It really sucked. It was simply dull, unoriginal and lacked elements of good story.