All Comments on 'Jen's Trip Ch. 01'

looking forward to ch.2.. btw, hope your character invested in duracell stock!

Thought this was well written, Lisa. Nothing was overdone or unrealistic. Has to be one of the best I've read on here.

Congrats,

Candida.

Enjoyed the story...looking forward to CH.2!

I liked this story a lot. It actually made me think that my gf and I aren't doing nearly enough with her toys for her. Your story is well written and put lots of ideas in my head. I would say it was a success! Keep them coming.

Very hot!

Also, so realistic.

What better place for a story like this but a busy hotel in the Big Apple?

Tantalyzing, with yummy suspense building!

I can't wait for part 2.

Love the multiple sexual theme in your story. Everyone of them sizzling hot! Can't wait for the next chapter to see how you're going to top this story.

This is great. i want more. Erotica from women is usually not hot enough for this woman.The woman's point of view was sensual, but the sex was explosively hot. i want chapter 2.

Very nice writing style here, yes we all want sex and you give it with flair. Alacrity.

Excellent story. I'm looking forward to part two.

Loved it, it's very hot and keeps building. The only thing I would ask, is that I'd like to know a little more about who Jen is?

I liked the buildup, sexy.

Very well written and incredibly hot!

eric shawn listo

Damn girl. I'd love to see more of your work:D He he he he Maybe one day the two of us can colaberate on a story;) I know we could do good work t'gether, jus as long as you do th writin:D

Very well done Lisa....I could almost imagine myself there in the hotel room with Jen!

I can see you're not afraid to test the boundaries of creative ideas for your stories!

Out.

You /are/ a really good writer.

Wow!... I just cant wait for chapter 2! (or for "Room Service")

Excellent lead in and content, Extremely arrousing. I give it a 2! (Thats 2 orgasms while reading)

I only wish it was longer (the story)

Cant wait for chapters 2-10!

SMILE!

Drew

Obviously, that thread got you 'thinking'.

So thanks for putting it down on paper.

Now get moving and get the next chapter posted, I'm dying to find out what happens next!

Iam only Bi and this really got me Horny

Lisa, great story, cant wait till you get the next chapter up! :)

You do an excellent job of painting a picture in the reader's mind. I throughly enjoyed it.

-Colly

Can't wait for the second chapter...you're such a naughty girl!

what a great story of a great time a women can have. she has her toys, her tease and her outfits. All three were described soooo hot. fun and hot reading...didn't know what was going to happen next.

I SO loved it! Can't wait for chapter two!

I fell in love with Jen as soon as I'd read about two paragraphs. I know it may be fictional but the ideas that she had make me want to try them myself!

Don't stop now girl! Stacie

Good morning. I stumbled across your story and just wanted to say hello. You are VERY attractive and a very good storyteller as well!

Thanks!

I liked this mucho

That was great, hurry with ch. 2

i just had to come see who you were..check out ur stories.

this sizzled!

chapter 2 tomorrow doll, thanks for the visit, and note on my story.

cheers! xx fawnie

saw you on the posts, good story

I liked the isolated sense this story had, the escape Jen achieved from the real world. It added to the intensity of her feelings and arousal, with the poor room-service girl providing a touch of hot humor. Very nicely done!

excellent; hot and sexy as hell

loved this story read it 2-3 times,each times invokeing incredible orgasims

very nice, very sexy

Loved both parts, read them over again. *S* Very hot.

Lisa I found it, I actuall came reading it you naughty girl. I could not figure out the sign up thing so I am anonymous- does it help if I say montreal. I am going to look for the other one but these addresses are funny.

It was better than your beaver joke. Sonya

I love your naughty, wicked mind!!!!

Love it!! ;-)

great story...

very imaginative and oh so naughty!

One would look far and wide to find a better story in this genre.

Bookmarked and added to favourites. One can read it again and again.

SN

I loved the illegality of the products. Made it even more daring an illicit.

this story is so freaking hot!!!!!!!!!

i want to bring room service!!!!!!

you go girl......

Great! Can I check into your hotel and come up to your room and watch while you pleasure yourself? I'd love to wank all over you...

This got me wet!

But Jen should have left the curtains open!

a friend said to read this one, i am so glad, good.

Good stuff Lady! I read both parts,

hoping there's more to come.

Ohh... I liked this! There's nothing like really devoted masturbation session :)

I'm pretty sure that I could not drop off to sleep until those batteries ran out of juice. Hot stuff! ~Imp

Juicy & naughty! Great combo!

I wonder if she knows my Jen? :-)

Hot story and sexy woman.

I think she should wear a butterfly to dinner at the hotel's resturant, or in the cab to show the cabbie!

Nice story. Part III???

nothing beats a good toy story!! I loved it!

You have to love a woman who loves herself, over and over and over...yum. This was fun - going on to round 2!

This was a delicious tale and is by far my favorite. I think I love you...

Delicious story Lisa. Can I cum round and watch, then squirt my cum over you as you play?

There is no doubt that this chapter and those that follow are some of the hottest and most erotic stories on Lit. Excellent job Lisa!!!!!!!!!!!!

Excellent. Well written, promises and delivers. 5 is not enough!

Well Lisa, you did very well in capturing the planning, anticipation, denial, and then final resolve of your protagonist while bringing us along for the ride.

What a pleasure it was to read your story.

a friend told me to look at this one, she was right.

what a very erotic story, could be there watching you put these clamps on those lovely large nipples. and then fuck you ass with your finger great.

Wickedly sexy story! My body responded very quickly. I would write more, but there is more of the story waiting.

Horus

Wow. I wish my stay in a NYC hotel was this hot. Maybe that was the noise I was hearing next door ;) Onto chapter 2. Kiwi.

Hallo Lisa!

Well written, hot-sexy story!.... Well, I don't know if there is much chance of you writing another lesbian sex story.... (Fuck I doubt that you will ever see this!).... But if you write another lesbian sex story, I would very much love to read it..

5-Stars and 5-Orgasms!.... Thank-you, for sharing your lovely story!

Gay Kat,