Well, the cat came out of the bag.
Now I hope you follow the romantic part and not just the sex part. I know that the author commented that this was a romantic story and without sex (or just not too much), sincerely, I hope it continues like this.
I have no daughters, only one son, but I have many sisters-in-law and two sisters, so I think you understand me ... right?
5 * for you.
I apologize for my English (yet and forever), isn't my native language.
Nice pacing and build-up (as was your first chapter), but mistakes in grammar, punctuation and tense abound. Ex: too and to don't mean the same thing. That said, I'll move on to (not too) chapter 3.
English
Great Beginning
This story has great potential. Please continue
Loving this...
Nice
Well, the cat came out of the bag.
Now I hope you follow the romantic part and not just the sex part. I know that the author commented that this was a romantic story and without sex (or just not too much), sincerely, I hope it continues like this.
I have no daughters, only one son, but I have many sisters-in-law and two sisters, so I think you understand me ... right?
5 * for you.
I apologize for my English (yet and forever), isn't my native language.
You Need An Editor
Nice pacing and build-up (as was your first chapter), but mistakes in grammar, punctuation and tense abound. Ex: too and to don't mean the same thing. That said, I'll move on to (not too) chapter 3.
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