Mother Examining Son Ch. 02

Great story

Please continue. Waiting for next installment.

HOT!!!! Read****

Thanks for sharing.

One of better second chapters.

Thanks for continuation of great writing.

Thanks!

What a great story, can't wait for the next installment!

Oh, bugger!

I gave chapter 1 two stars because - as a colon cancer survivor - I've never seen or experienced anything remotely erotic, about a rectal or prostate exam. I gave this chapter a 4, because my lady quite enjoys anal, and the sex in this chapter was described in a terribly hot way. But, I'm figuring that the next installment is going to get a solid single star, if the entire text is dedicated to the stupid idiot receiving an enema. Let's have a little 'standard' dick-in-pussy sex, at least, before the author continues with his/her asinine fetish with the back door!

A very yummy addition to this story!

Yes, very yummy indeed! I'm looking forward to more of this story! Thank you!

Interesting

I've quite enjoyed your story so far, a little unusual which is what is making it so intresting I think. I can't remember reading another mother son story where he uses her arse first!
Thanks for posting it.

WOW--So hot!!

Both chapters were wonderful. However, this second chapter was definitely better written and so hot. I came 3 times reading it. Can't wait for chapter 3.

Again arse play and the like not my thing

But a sexy story with more potential none the less.

Consider an editor.

The story definitely has heat and chemistry between the son and mom. But I urge you to share your work with an editor before posting. This text is littered with spelling and grammar mistakes and confusion. That makes reading it slow and clunky as I spend a moment to decipher your intend meaning.

More (at least for my read) is that they used bar soap for lubricant. Anyone who has ever tried that could tell you that that would not end well. It would have lead to tears - and I don't mean tears of joy. It’s okay that you didn't know that, but your own sexual blind spot (we all have them) is all the more reason for you to consult at least one editor before posting.

None of this is meant in anger or to insult. I think the story and its progression is exciting and rich with promise. A good editor can elevate it to excellence. Every writer who ever published a well liked (let alone loved) story passed it under an editor's nose.

A nice mother-son story..... her son needs to be educated and his Mom can teach him. Letting her son bend her over the bed and screw her pussy doggie style might be a lot of fun for them. Maybe, his Mom might like to get cum covered at times ? Some descriptive details about Mom and son would be helpful too. That would enhance the story. Thank you.

Great Story

What a beginning! This son did what I have always wante dto do.......fuck my mother in the ass and cum deeper in her lovely ass. That has been my biggest fantasy and as I jack off I think of my mom's ass and me fucking it hard and long.

More!

More!

Tantilisingly seductive

Your portrayal of the Mother and the build up of the son added a great combination of expectation which you certainly delivered in action and character development. I loved the way you changed the mothers habits (Nude walks to shower) and increased them but kept a level of proper until exam time. Hahha. I look forward to more. Cheers.

Ass playis Ok and the enema is fair

but I think the vast majority here ant you to tell us about the boy putting his cock in his mother's cunt and fucking her hard and often maybe giving her and the aunt a kid..

AMAZING!!

Just the right amount of erotica and taboo... Please! Mate, you *must* go on to part 3! This is one of those rare gems which make litterotica great...

pay attention

to your spelling and the ass play it sounds like a Freudian slip when you say "he" when you are talking about "her" and then the ass play before any pussy play. it is a good story but need to work on pronoun usage other wise you could be talking about a son fantasizing abouyt his father instead of his mother and regarding the making a baby comments NO that is not a hot thing to do that has always been a turn off in incest stories for most of us READERS and writers

your chapters need to be longer as i said in the comments in the last so called chapter. I also agree with the need to proofread and make sure you catch spelling and usage errors.
This could become a huge series if you work on the above.

Ummmm

I enjoyed both your stories. I like short hot stories and both of yours were. Keep up the good work. Only listen to the comments that help you.

5***** Story

Just the right pace. Loved it. Jane Marwood. X

Baby making

I completely agree with one of the others. This whole making a baby with mommy crap always makes me think the writer is about 12 or 13 years old. Let's keep it to suck it and fuck it & lick it and stick it. Have fun.

Wow!

I love her juicy cunny! Just like Grandmas! Possum pie delight!

An improvement over the first chapter.

You say you want constructive criticism, so watch the use of the ampersand. Only two or three uses this time, which is a big improvement over the first chapter, but you need to remember that the ampersand does not replace the word "and" when writing. I will award this a five for the improvement.

Not much story here.

Won't argue with all those who like these two entries, but there wasn't much story. Its not amazing that mom and son ended up in bed together, since both wanted it, they had no scruples about it, and there were no impediments to their doing so. The only thing I can't figure out why it took two years to do it.

Spark of talent detected

You clearly have a talent for building a scene and immersing the reader in the image.

I think one thing you could do, which a ton of writers don't, is use more dialogue. It makes the characters more lifelike and I think it takes a story from a 5 to a 10 instantly.

Also, yeah, soap as a lubricant is a horrible idea. It burns something fierce. Same thing for soap in the vag, FYI. Having known that, it took me out of the story (but I persevered!).