My Sister's Visit

More Please

Very good, I hope there are more episodes to this story

Very excting

In the morning, hope the big sister casually bends or sits carelessly in the sofa displaying her parted pussy lips to her little brother. Then as always she likes to hug him, then his cock accidentally slipped inside her pussy. As he got mortified of what had happened she just said to her brother that it is alright and he doesn't have to worry about it.

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Started out good but quickly deteriorated. I don't think that anyone is very impressed with your vocabulary (except for you). Makes me want to go out and buy a new Roget's Thesaurus.....NOT.
The incest was only alluded to and not very skillfully. I think you have potential as a writer but you need a good editorial advisor. I gave you 2 stars but I expect to give you 4-5 on your future endeavors. Just please stop the ridiculously exaggerated precum stuff.

Total fucking rubbish

Crap from start to finish

Don't leave me hard

Great tips end attention..keep cumming

great start

hope for more chapters.

Mother becomes sister?

Why the hell is his "sister" addressing him like she was his mother? I think you took some mom incest fiction and shoehorned in "sister" to fit your fantasy without proofreading or editing.

eh

never use a big word when a diminutive one will suffice.

stop writing

What the hell was this? A sister who mothers and the plot is jacking off? What is even appealing about that?

Good

Nice description of intense feelings that could be for real.

Thesaurus much?

I'm as verbose as the next guy, but misusing words like fulgent or needlessly throwing quotidian around when the word you wanted was nonchalant betrays the fact that you are using a thesaurus feature heavily. Even if a thesaurus calls something a synonym, the words aren't necessarily interchangeable.

I mean, the story's okay and kinda hot, but the vocabulary makes it really weird to read. The simpler it's written, the more engaging it becomes. Big words only serve to flatter your own ego.

I'm diabetic

And this story just had too many sweeties for me. Other than that I liked it

For A Flash****

That was damn good!! Thanks for sharing.

WOW..made me hot

Your writing is so captivating..only a hater or possibly jealous folks could find fault in such stories. Your words clearly show your intelligence and as knowing you I can tell people that you are genuine. Keep putting out the great stories...I LOVE how this story made me feel...

it was to short to call a story more like a very short story. Try to make your stories at least 2 pages here.. not on word.
It's a good start to what could be a great series if you put details in and keep the chapters nice and long.

More!

More! Sister: she definitely needs it! He needs to get into that!

More please.

I like this one.

Awesome!

Have her shove a long finger way up his shit chute till he spurts and shrieks her name.