Twisting the Neighbors Ch. 01

THe element of truth?

He once moved into an apartment...

"As with all your stories..." You mean the one chapter? And yet another 1* cuck rubbish writer claiming they're 'true stories'.

This, presumably, is one of the true parts of the story ?

"Finger bang my married pussy"

Of course, the average woman about to commit adultery will always refer to her vagina as "my married pussy".

What about the rest of her? Are all the other bits married as well ? Did she say "Let me wrap my married hand around your cock ?"

Blowjobs? "I love the feeling of you in my married mouth."

The possibilities for LW authors are endless.

Lue

Well, you hit all the cliches

Bull, alpha, true story, blah, blah. Come on, dude, we all know you have a tiny little weenie and you've never been laid in your life. "All my other stories?" What, you're some big shot author now? Where are "all these other stories?" You're just another fucking gas bag. What a stupid story.

Too stupid

If anyone believes this is true, they deserve to read your garbage. As a woman, if you came at me with the lame shit you pull in the stories, I would laugh you right out of the room..... A Jacuzzi, gee how original, right out of a bad porn movie, at least you have an imagination if not much of anything else.... 2****

Excellent example of a brain dead author.

Likely at birth they threw the baby away and kept the after birth. Which is now known as this author.

Loved it!!

Part 2?

just remember

every steer was once a proud bull

1*

bullSHIT from bulldave. as you'd expect.

LOL, from this, you can just tell how the writer's friends see him.

Another fantasy story about...

Another fantasy story about a sad and lonely man, his only fun being imagine all this bullshit. As a man no one likes and have no friends, his only way is to jerk off imagining he is with every women he crosses path with, like he did in the middle of this bad and sad story. I think he watched the movie "Fifty Shades of Grey" and from then on he imagined he was the leading actor! 1*

Part 2

Is where the asshole gets parted from his 2 most important parts and everyone loses theit sympathy for himE313

Liked it

Hot and fun. A real man takes what he wants.

Yes it's dumb

But at least he is fantasizing about fucking another man's wife. instead of most of the crap authors around here,who fantasize about other men fucking their wives while they watch and jack off.

@Anonymous re: Liked it

"A real man takes what he wants"! Like what? Raping? Pedophilia? "taking" in the ass? If the husband is a real man, then taking the"bull"'s life? What a stupid statement! Did a real man took your wife and children from you?
The story? As bad as this stupid comment! It was enough to see that @systech24 favorited this story to know it would be worst than you could imagine!

Sad Story

So this limp dick has to help a cheater while at the same time he betrays the husband's trust. Must make him fell like a real man. No wonder he is alone.

re: anonymous-liked it

Is that so? I hate to be a friend of yours. Would you consider me a friend if I took your wife from you? Maybe your daughter? Yeah, now that would be a real friend, eh?
Guys like you turn my stomach.

A measure of truth? More like complete and utter bullshit.

So a "real man" fucks his friends wife? A "real man" takes what he wants? Is that what a "real man" does, Dave? How foolish of me, I had always assumed that real men were honest, dependable, trustworthy and have integrity.

I don't care that your "mostly true" story, as you call it, probably has happened. After all, people can and will stupid things; but don't insult the rest of us by calling him a "real man". Real men don't stab their friends in the back or fuck up their marriage.

Appreciate the feedback

Thanks for reading, even to those who specifically read it with the intention of hating it. A point of clarification about the intro: I've written a number of stories, but this is the first one I've gotten around to publishing. Sorry for the confusion.

Enjoy all comments, especially the one about being afterbirth. And to answer a previous question, I do not condone rape or pedophilia. A bit of an odd extrapolation, but appreciate the question, nonetheless.

Take care.

O.K. Dave's character is a total jerk, but...

What is this category about? This was so well written, and erotic. I don't understand why many of the critics are reading stories on this site. What do you expect? I guess stories about faithful loving marriages. If so, you're reading in the wrong site and category. To the author, thanks, I gave it a *****.

Impossible to like this story

The main character was a complete and utter asshole. He starts out with a couple of fuck buddies. None of them care about disease or pregnancy as they don't use protection. He's snarling a some little guy that won't say "hello" to him. And in the end he's fucking another man's wife and doesn't care if he gets her pregnant. Down in Texas he'd be lucky if some boyfriend or husband didn't just shoot him and throw his body out in the sticks. He sure deserved it. Poorly conceived. I didn't believe for a minute any of this was true. Think about it. You're on a porn site on the world wide web. No one believes a word coming out of your mouth. The only thing the "true story" garbage does is make us laugh. It does nothing for the story. Badly written. Dialogue by a 15 year old, pimply faced teenage boy. "Stretch you out"? Make you mine? Really??? At the end I wanted to get up and wash my hands. This was just plain nasty and NOT in a sexy or erotic way.
1 star

author's comment

Strange comment. Readers read these stories for the intention of hating them? Really. Can't really hate a story until it's read. Personally I don't read a story until I check out the comments first. Saves a lot of time reading something I wouldn't like.
Comments told me not to read this story, so author, I don't hate your story, but I bet I would if I read it.

what a load of bull, dave

at least you have an active imagination and you use words well. couldn't finish it. needed to watch some paint dry.

Good

I enjoy cuckold stories. Hope you continue and bring Tony back from his trip and into the cuckold life.

what are you

a little boy who has not yet the puberty vocal change ?

1*

TRASH

your mind is sick

What you write reflects what you are......get help fast.......

Good start, needs a chapter 2

I was hoping for a tad more difficult initial seduction, but maybe she can feel guilty and pull back and try to avoid Dave for a while, but her memories of the orgasms will pull her back in and then Dave can really begin the domination and impregnation.

5*

You need to improve your grammar a little but the story itself was fantastic.

Sorry, but just too ridiculous. Maybe Bullshitdave would be more accurate?

In my mind's eye I see a pimple-faced blimp typing with one hand and jacking off with the other as you fantasize about dominating and owning a beautiful young woman. That's fine. Just don't spend too much writing this drivel. Your chips will go stale, your cream soda will go flat, and your peepee is going to get real sore.

P.S. Little hairy skinny guys know they could never beat a bull like him in a fist fight. So if he's lucky Tony will only ambush him with a baseball bat, rather stick the muzzle of a .22 into an empty soda bottle and blow his brains out; pfutt, pfutt, pfutt! Better be careful where you leave the cream soda empties.

Total crap

Stop writing this trash. Chuck author

I liked it!

I live in TX, and can honestly say that people are proud, but friendly. Morals down here aren't what they used to be, so yes, there are fuck buddies (heaven forbid!). Does the author really need to take a timeout of the story to decipher whether the fuckbuddies and Dave use protection? NO!!! WHY??? It's not important to the story. Stop nit-picking for petesake! It was a hot concept!! He never said, "this totally happened 100%!" It's loosely based... Use your heads!
To the author...thanks for the read. Maybe don't have Dave be such a dick to Lenny, now that he's got her?? But all-in-all, I thought it was a good story about a young, horny, 20-something just starting out. Good luck w/chapter 2!

Please at the end

Make it a btb and this as stain gets killed or crippled !

NEEDS WORK!

You have a good idea for a story here, Dave; you just developed it, shall we say, badly. As others have pointed out, nobody believes authors who pretend these stories are mostly factual. Sure, something you saw suggested the story, maybe in this case the couple moved in next door and you wanted her, but that’s where it ended.

If you want to make it believable let Dave and Lenny meet and over the course of time Dave moves in, step by step until finally he has her where he wants her. Show him making his big move, and then us see her fighting the battle raging within her conservative mind, before finally after soul wrenching agony she succumbs to her baser instincts, gets her first taste of a bigger cock (not the 10 incher of porn fame, but something the average man can relate to) then the relationship develops from there.

All dialogue where he’s telling her about her ‘married pussy’ or where she mentions her married state immediately throws water on the reader. That’s the point we say “bullshit”.

If you want to stick with your story line, then Lenny should have a past loose sexual life where she marries hubby for some reason besides love. Then a woman who has played fast and loose before might act as you have Lenny acting, but what I said about the ‘married shit’ still holds. If a non-professional women really talked like that, we readers aren’t going to believe it anyway and it’s hurting your story.

And before you ask—no, I haven’t always followed my own advice.
Keep writing—I’ll be looking for your next story.

Wow, cry babies all over the place ......
Your worried about Texazz come on people, worried about a girl, its a sex story... Did you read the dam title first ...

Looking forward to more chapters, keep using her. Bring in the other girls as well. Hell make the husband bring Dave a beer and a hot washcloth when he is done with his wife

Fuck you

Where I come from Dave would take a permanent header into a remote mine shaft. Lenny would follow and then Dave's severed penis. Asshat bulls die painfully and bloody out here in the desert

great story

can not wait for next chapter please post soon. to all the haters if you do not like it then do not read it. if you are wanting to kill the author then it is you who has serious problems and needs help. to the people that do not like all the cuck shit please stop saying it and read a different category, loving wives involve cuckold that is the nature of the category it does not mean that the stories are about a wife making love to her husband every night when he gets home from work. if you do not like the stories then write your own. the stories are not all written by English teachers so there might be some grammatical errors get over it

Bulling around

Nice effort. For most it is hard to be assertive. Not all succumb to that approach, but some do if you can stand rejection when it doesn't work out. I look forward to chapter 2, and of course reading more moronic comments from anons who police the site for some reason.

re: anonymous-great story

Jeez, fellow, would you stop your fucking whining. Just read the damn story, praise the hell out of it, and then shut the fuck up. Do you really think your ranting is going to change anybody here? Oh, sorry, I keep forgetting some of you use this site as a means to vent off steam and frustration at your own pitiful life. Please, continue your rant, how awful thoughtless of me.