She Placed His Pleasure Above Me

another cuck fetish with gay undertone of wishing he's the faggot cuckboi

Yet another lot of 1* trash, what the fuck is wrong with these 'writers' are they all cuck wimps? or 13 year olds down in mommy's basement fantasizing about this bullshit.

So what

Divorce comes before death... now you got a head start, so use it to get to the bank accounts and a better lawyer while she's busy sealing her fate

Amazing

Just when you think things can't get any worse. Hey, systech24 gave you a favorite. That makes it all worthwhile. Systech rocks.

Hmmm

We all know this story was written just to piss off the masses just like Stone was.... There is not a man anywhere unless you're a Sissy cuck loser who would act like this idiot.... Hope admin starts banning these idiots soon.....

Sick author!

Take a long walk on a short pier you little piss ant author.

Disgusting

then leave - don't discuss it just leave

A vomiting...

A vomiting designed to piss off the readers...1* (where are the negative ratings when we need them?)

so gross

i just vomit a little in my mouth eewwwww

Pure

Horseshit

What an idiotic bunch of shit!!! MINUS 5*!!!

Are that author brain sick or what?? We are at loving wives and he posted his crap at that side?? Are the supervisors all incompetent?? How has that category lost niveau!!! Only cuck shit by insane or pervert authors and brain sick fans who acclaim!!!

OMG

You poor sod, your wife just declared her love for her new man, she jacked him off all over your face, she has replaced you in her life, now ya just need to have a shower, hopefully by that time you will have grown a pair of balls, then walk into the main bedroom that now is no longer yours, pack up everything that you own, then leave, you have lost everything, it is only a matter of time before she starts divorce proceedings to get rid of her so called loving useless husband, but it is very highly doubtful this hubby will ever grow a pair, and it won't take long before he takes the cowards way out by offing himself, you mark my words, lol

1*

fag cuck shit.

WTF

Not going to read this new author. Not one single positive comment. Sounds like another new sewer rat that escaped the asylum. Where the hell do these scum authors come from? -1*, yes were are the negative scores when you need them?

Who are these people

so determinedly dominant, so lacking in chivalry that the lady's pleasure is not theirs, so unsure of their own desires they can't tolerate an experience of utter loss, utter humiliation, even as fiction? Not even as a play on words (his pleasure placed above me, literally)? Creeps!

1*

DRECK

very good portrait

of a sick mind.

Grow a pair

No wonder she picked him, if lay there and let that happen. If you were tried up say so and you were they have to keep you that way too to keep you from killing them!

No story here.

Just some cheap suck and fuck. Why are all three of them there? Why would he let Matt into the room? What makes his wife think he simply won't grab his gun and shoot her and her lover? With no setup this mess made no sense. Either kick the crap out of Matt and throw him out or pack and leave. Either way his marriage is over. Who would stay with a cheating slut? One that has no problem demeaning, degrading and humiliating her husband? This wasn't worth the time spent to read it.
zero stars

yuck 1*
tells much about this writer, simple and purely a beta cuck. kudos to you for being a worthless wimp.

-1*

Yea, grow a pair and destroy both of them. Take pictures and show them to all of the family members.

Can it possibly get any worse today?

Fkn genetic abnormalities posing as authors. These guys are a walking argument for abortion!

WOW!

Congratulations on having the balls to post your first attempt at writing a story, on loving wives. The comment writers sure had their fun, but I notice not one of them offered advice on how you could improve. (Yes, you do need to improve.)

Let me give a few tips. #1 Set the story up—what the heck is hubby doing in that position, as far as that goes how is he in that position? I’m not too up to date on things, but I thought a divan was a sofa, which begs the question, how does one get under a sofa? Why am I nit-picking this? You need to make your stories believable, even if one has to suspend unbelief to do so. You are asking your reader to make too big a jump here.
#2 You need to set your characters and story on stage. Why are the three of them here at this time? You just grabbed up three people, stuck hubby under the divan while wifey fucks boyfriend up top. They all obviously know about everyone’s presence and yet they don’t seem to care—there has to be a story behind that one.
#3 Study other highly rated stories on this site and use them as a guide. Remember you need a beginning, middle and an end. You gave us no beginning, which kept the middle from making sense, and a half-ass ending.
#4 on the positive side your writing craft is not at all bad for a beginner, and you do show imagination with your plot. (Who the hell would put a man under a sofa?) That’s thinking ‘out of the box.’

Not my cup of tea,

but better written than many on this site.

Carolina Dreamer

Please you need spell check and a editor when you post your need help comments.
Your comments are longer than the story.Get a life.Why would you think anyone here wants your help.Write your won stories.

Whoa, Wrong Story Section!!!

This is so fucking gay my hard drive went limp. Get the useless broad out of the way and go get that big beautiful luscious cock, in your mouth, coating your tonsils with jizz. Can't gay bulls humiliate gay pansies without going through women? You should Google it. Suck a cock in your IT department and they will show you how.

Great job!

Please keep writing!

What's going on?

This was okay for a flash read, but it screams out for more characterization. Who were these people? Why do they find themselves in this position?
Nothing wrong with the writing, I just wish we knew a little more about the background. But even so the idea was hot.
As for the negative comments; I knew what the story was about before reading it, why don't you? To one particular reader; a divan is a bed, not a sofa!
Basically, post in the category you feel is right, but beware of "loving wives," as its inhabited by narrow minded bigots, and they'll do whatever they can to put you down. I just wonder why they read these type of stories?
Anyway, as a first attempt it was good, please try to include a beginning and middle, otherwise it's just a spoiler.
I'm giving it five, a little to wind up the trolls, but mainly I can recognise someone who can write something that I want to read.