Gasm Pt.01

A fun story

Keep going, this was a fun read. I have to know what happends next

I gave it four stars.

It was a good read, but not great. Generally well paced, but did drag in the middle when they got to Mary's mansion. The dialogue needs work. It came across stiff. Also the sex scenes were not as descriptive as I should've been, after all this is a stroke story. But overall a good first effort. Panther fan.

Good story, well written and well paced

Potatoes

And the stars were aligned as one, reuniting the great cheesy kleptomatic space-potatoes, and soon all fell silent as the truth of the wabzer-dabzer set in. There would be nowhere to hide from the supposed banana chips, not in the pits of tarter sauce or the den of many outdated computer monitors. When finally the people of embadabadeembadu would finally find rest, and the cheesy kleptomatic space-potatoes were done pillaging for llama embers, there would be pizza for all.

Thank you. (4/5 on the story btw)

Fucking great!

I'm big into mind control stories and have read many. This one has things that many others lack. I love the villian aspect! I also like the amount of storytelling vs sex time. Lots of stories take pages and pages explaining each character and each sexual act. You have found the right balance to move the story along so it doesn't take all day of reading to events to unfold. If there were 50 chapters of this story I would sit and read every one of them, for literary enjoyment. Please keep them coming and soon. Very glad I gave this one a chance!

Anon

It was pretty intriguing, but, there were some Grammer errors. Other than that, keep it up! Look forward to more

I liked this series.

To me it's becoming a recipe.
All series do, because they ARE series, but something in the way of variety or challenge is needed. Batman in the 60's used novelty with it's silliness and graphics, certainly the plots didn't change a lot.
This chain has some new ideas, I love them, but you can't overcome all obstacles by "gasms" well you can but the read er s attention lags if you do.
Love the ideas I hope there are twists coming.
(Yes I am aware of the terrible puns that might be generated by "overy come etc.)