Our First Time Sharing in Cabo

Old people who can cum five times a day

Must have superpowers. Mindless stupidity.

Good fantasy

I loved the presentation. No humiliation and the guy got to score too! A rarity in this section. Thanks for the foreword. It is easier to get into a sharing story when we realize that it is just a fantasy. This IS a porn site so we should be somewhat more open to different lifestyles.

1*

cuck shit.

A fantasy can be as wild and impossible to happen as we want...

A fantasy can be as wild and impossible to happen as we want...And what is interesting to some, is a turn off to others...That's what happened in this one...2*

A hot fantasy

Thanks for sharing your story.A lot of husbands have this fantasy but are just afraid to share them.

When you set up

A couple for divorce and continued cheating, the story loses its vigor. You see no matter if only one or both parties score... the cheating, and yes swapping is still cheating, removes the faith and trust the parties once shared

Great story

This is a great story - hot and sensuous. More please and soon. Five Stars!!

What was his fantasy about?

His wife cheating with the first man she met, without wait for his agreement, or he fucking a cute 22 years old girl? What was missing? The girl calling him daddy!

Lousy story

normal shit for this category anymore, another shit day in LW 1*

do us a favor

stop posting, your stories suck big time, same shit different day

Continue the story. I think these two are going to have a lot more fun.

Nice try.

You can only do better.

re:nice try

doubtful, nothing can improve this trash, nothing!

3 baboons today

the tribe must be near, time to shoo them back into the sewer

Needed Much More Thought

Is it a fantasy? OK, then make everything consistent with that approach. Take out the jarring snippets of reality and go for it. On that level it could have been a reasonably titillating escapist drama.

OR
Is it supposed to be reality? Then why on earth did a wife described as conservative allow a stranger to feel her up on the plane? Why didn't they think about the possible consequences of fucking around? Doesn't make sense as a description of real people behaving rationally.

Because that author never resolved this issue what could have been an enjoyable fantasy actually seemed to be about two extraordinarily shortsighted people doing something rather sordid that they would probably regret.

Good first attempt

Well do done for trying, lots of idiot anonymous commentators around as I have just found on my first attempt at erotica.

Keep going and sod the idiots.

re: anonymous-a hot fantasy

How do you know? Are you going by what readers say in loving wives? Maybe you better check the facts before you give alternate views. Where have I heard that before?

Hey "swalk"

Maybe you and this author better stop posting, the idiots don't like your themes of stories. Neither one of you is an erotic writer. So do us all a favor and find another site to spew your garbage. Who is the idiot, the one posting shit, or the one complaining about it?

Improbable

and thus the lower entertainment factor for some percentage of readership. the wife is conservative, but seems to very quickly and easily get reeled in by Pete. the husband can orgasm 4 or 5 times a day at 57 yrs old. these story facts strain credibility when measured against real world human behavior and ability, thus making this all just a fanciful writeup. This category responds best to well written stories where the characters (some or all) are able to be identified with by the reader. we need to see ourselves in one or more of the characters "shoes" so to speak.
Not bad for first effort though, keep writing and ignore all the static.

Lousy fantasy

Just didn't make for an interesting or entertaining story. Poorly constructed (unbelievable) story line, bad dialogue and unlikable characters made for a bad story.

A decent first effort

but it's rough. 3*

I liked it.

I thought it was well done ... just my opinion!

"A" for effort, 3 for content.

First, this is a credible first story and judging by the number of comments a common male fantasy. But! Why would a conservative Christian wife suddenly turn into a slut during a plane ride? Out of town vacations tend to bring out the animal instincts but this was too much to believe. And the husbands stamina? And a college girl who wants to try an older guy? With her husband in the next bed? Please, one miracle per story. We readers of smut (err...erotic literature, sorry) are eager to suspend disbelief, but don't push it!

There are many choppy sentences. Let's start with the first paragraph.

"This is my first try at writing. I'd appreciate constructive comments. Unfortunately, none of this is true. While I've had these fantasies about my wife, I've only hinted that I might like for her to do something like this."

Allow me to edit.

"This is my first story and I'd appreciate constructive criticism. I have wife sharing fantasies but I've never told my wife. I've dropped hints but she ignores them or doesn't understand, so unfortunately this story is fiction. So far."

And don't forget to put a question mark after a question...you did that a few times.

You could write a whole story about a husband broaching the subject of wife sharing with his conservative wife. I bet lots of guys would read that just to get ideas!

Wow, first time out and you've already discovered Martian Slut Ray.

How else to explain the wife's sudden loss of commitment and self respect? The husband was already stupid, saving the Martians a shot with that ray.

Very well written by someone who knows nothing about normal married women in happy marriages. Try again, but make it more plausible. If women have a slut switch I've never been able to find it. Interestingly sluts seem to have a monogamy switch, but they only turn it on when their husbands are around.

Ignore the haters...

Loving Wives is a punishing genre for comments on this site but the star ratings on your story tell the truth. Keep writing! I didn't like every element of it but overall found it hot and loved how the wife was led into anal at the end.

Very good first story.

I think it's a very good first effort. Keep writing and thanks for sharing.

re: ignore the haters

So if one thinks this story sucks, he's a hater. Better look in the mirror fellow, who is the real hater here? The one that doesn't like the story, or the one that has a cow about other readers, just because they think the story stinks. Think about it, eventually it will come to you.

@writingn006

The scores tell the truth? Not really, there are a lot of stories in LW with high scores that aren't worth wasting time to read them. All that means there are many perverts who think anything with a slut wife is erotic. You must fall into that category, if so, good for you.
Did you ever notice, guys like you like to complain a lot, usually say little about the story, whereas most comments refer to the story. Why is that writingn006?
No comment on story, not going to read it. Wife sharing isn't my cup of tea.

gotta be a

cream pie eater author
1 star

Well at least hubby got a tight 22yr old piece

That is the only thing that saved this.

fantasy guy

Good story, sort of. Hubby said there were times when they didn't have sex for 6 mo's or so. ? Whats with that, then go on vacation and immediately she wants to have sex with a strange guy and hubby is supposed to be good with it> Hmmm.
Maybe they could get together with the younger couple who could" get it up" more often.Hmmmm.

Good story but they didn't plan on cheating/swinging so vacation would've been ruined as soon as her talk , flirting and touch would've happened on the plane. If it got passed that a kiss on the lips or her asking to fuck him would've definitely ended bad . Take it one step further and he ass fucks her which she never lets hubby do. Maybe just enjoy the week ducking whoever you can then get home and dump her cheating sneaky ass. It would seem to me that she's cheated all along if she could do it that easy

Sorry not my cup of tea

nothing erotic about this, didn't do a thing for me

Got only one question

How did something like this get over three stars. Puzzling, really puzzling.

1*

cuck shit.