All Comments on 'Naïve Natalie'

Not exactly a story yet. You should have waited until the 'to be continued' bit was added, instead of posting it here half-baked.

Your fingers must have run out of energy. This seems to be a good start but not enough to post. Try to get at least a ten minute read before submitting, this is not a story. Many books have more words on their back covers.

Please Sir, may we have some more?

Why bother