about going from describing how her husband was electrocuted, to in the next paragraph describing a failed date as there not being a spark between them.
I am sorry to hear you are having trouble with your stories. You have been one of the most prolific and consistently good writers on this site. Thank you for sharing your stories.
Good story and good journeyman writing, as always. Your workmanship is in the upper 1/10% of what gets published here. But the story lacks tension. It's a good formulation: man loses dog, man gets dog and girl. But it lacks the "man loses girl" element. We can see the complete plot just as soon as Logan spies his dog across the park. There has to be some adversity the characters overcome, otherwise the plot is too pat.
With the comment below arguing there was a lack of tension. Frankly I think that's a common theme among many of your stories, and probably also ties into your boredom.
I made a comment suggestion once for a story idea and I still think it's a good one: a dark rewrite of Climbing Jacob's Ladder, with the father still alive.
You have a way of weaving a tale that draws emotions from me in a most unexpected manner! I love how I can predict the couple will get together and still get choked up when they actually do! You are a storyteller Komrad1156!
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another tear jerker
a straight 5 all the way
Nice
This is a very nice romantic story!
I don't know
about going from describing how her husband was electrocuted, to in the next paragraph describing a failed date as there not being a spark between them.
Great story as usual.
I am sorry to hear you are having trouble with your stories. You have been one of the most prolific and consistently good writers on this site. Thank you for sharing your stories.
Dear Author, greatly enjoyed your romantic love story. Thank you as usual for another five rated effort. jntiques
Good...but.
Good story and good journeyman writing, as always. Your workmanship is in the upper 1/10% of what gets published here. But the story lacks tension. It's a good formulation: man loses dog, man gets dog and girl. But it lacks the "man loses girl" element. We can see the complete plot just as soon as Logan spies his dog across the park. There has to be some adversity the characters overcome, otherwise the plot is too pat.
What a fantastic story!
I really enjoyed reading it and I actually did have a tear or two in my eye!
I Agree...
With the comment below arguing there was a lack of tension. Frankly I think that's a common theme among many of your stories, and probably also ties into your boredom.
I made a comment suggestion once for a story idea and I still think it's a good one: a dark rewrite of Climbing Jacob's Ladder, with the father still alive.
Don't know
Where you get these but, another winner! Please keep writing. If you've published anything, let me know...I would like to read.
Don't listen ...
... to the comments wanting more tension, the story was terrific!
What a good story!
I totally enjoyed this and am now looking forward to the next "gem" you pen!
Wow
You have a way of weaving a tale that draws emotions from me in a most unexpected manner! I love how I can predict the couple will get together and still get choked up when they actually do! You are a storyteller Komrad1156!
Another wonderful love story!
I'm running out of original words to say how really good your stories are! With that, I'll say thank you for sharing them with us!
Great Story
As usual, you tell a great story.. thank you
simple, sweet, satisfying
an ah shucks kinda story.
thanks
Whose house anyway?
Was good except when they were at his house, then suddenly it's bedtime and they're at her house? Confusing.
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