Call Me Bunny [+ prologue]

I don't think the "prologue" improved it much

If this was better, the other must have been lights out suck.

Prologue or not, this was utter garbage, not surprised Systechdickhead likes it.

Garbage

Story sucked, but what's sad is this isn't the worst story tonight.... 1*** to the cuck writer.....

"That was really dumb" she said

Amen to that.

What the prologue shows?

What the prologue shows? That she was really a selfish woman...in her marriage all had to be done as she wanted. Examples: She didn't want to go to Vegas...what she does? No sex for her husband...She did want to prove a theory, her husband had to go with it...She was almost raped in her work place, and she felt it wasn't important to tell it to her husband...Any man would think what other things had she hid from him through their marriage! But she had her husband in the palm of her hand...Not once did he stated what he really wanted or thought...just said Yes to all her wishes...1*

The author said it in the story himself

Bunny was mentally ill, and he was right! The story sucked. Because nobody likes stories about mentally ill ex wives and for sure she was an ex after that performance

It was different!

Well written. Not so bad really.

You left the prologue off this posting too.

So we don't really know who these people are, why he's mad about going to an HVAC convention or why his wife is pissed about getting away from home for a couple of days. I assume that he's an HVAC contractor. In which case it would be very important to his business to stay up to date with the latest equipment and updates in his field. So he'd be busy all day. Why drag the wife? She could sit out by the pool if she liked. Or do a little shopping. Conventions are held in big cities. What's not to like? These two are such unlikable characters and you did such a lousy job in the writing that this just isn't interesting.
1 star

I Liked It

A very interesting and unusual story, with some psychological insights to boot. Well written, and the description of the sex with her husband is hot. 5*

expertly crafted

I rated it a 5
The plot took frequent unusual directions...which is fine and original
For me personally (and I understand my opinions are just mine - 1 reader) the story arc was unsatisfying.
The standard model of 'building action' leading to 'peak of story', but the payoff at the end was not as much as I wanted.
Excellently word smithed.

It was crafted to make Zeke a loser.

Maybe he is, maybe he isnt but it felt forced not really organic. And hes not mad his wife fucked some other guy but gets uoset because she didn't tell him she was attacked?

3 stars.