All Comments on 'A Gift From His Father Ch. 31'

I have been following this series for a long tme waiting to find out the end, thank you for the diligence and time you put into completing this story. I checked just yesterday for another part and was dissapointed to see there wasn't one.

Thankyou for the series, your creative expression, And the completion of a journey.

(first comment on a story ever, Well done!) CK

Congratulations on finishing up the series. Really enjoyed it and could sense you wrapping it up these last few chapters. I look forward to seeing the characters again sometime soon!

Once again, thanks to you my readers and my editor Spirit02. I look forward to continuing the adventures of these characters, I've some pretty good ideas peculating.

First, I hope to conclude "The Nude Gun".

A great series thank you for finishing it. Although this seems to be the end I do see the possibility of five totally separate story lines in the future.

I've read and re-read this series since it's inception and am glad to see it come to completion - so many start and are never finished. Looking forward to off-shoots and more of your other works! 5 *'s!!

So worth the wait. Looking forward to more stories regardless the titles

Can't wait to see where this goes, following the characters. This has been a great story so far, glad to see that the wrap up isn't the end.

I'll be waiting for the next series!

It's a really great story and a really nice addition!

But please don't let the story end here.

Or at least think of a spin off, it would be sad if a great story line like this wouldn't continue.

But I see the difficulties in continuing....

If possible for you please try!

Great work!

Thanks!

A great series. Thanks for taking the time to finish it. A nice story, in addition to all the sex. Terrrific Job!

Don't you dare change what you have written ,only the intros where you reintroduce all and sundry again it gets a little long in the tooth having too read about all the characters in almost every chapter and the new ones ,me thinks best you surprise us with the characters...just my opinion cheers

Please bring all the main characters back in the next series I really found myself drawn into each personality your writing style is excellent and with so many avenues you could take the next series to even greater heights than this one.

I also want to thank you for all the time and effort it must have taken to write this epic adventure so thank you from my heart and please don't leave it too long as I'm looking forward to the next one cheers😃😃🔟out of🔟

Is it going to be as long as this one! :)

I've loved reading this series and happy & sad it's coming to a conclusion. It's been fun reading about all the exploits of all the characters. Thank you.

(Bigd1965bigd)

I have read many stories on here. I think this is part of my top 2 or 3 stories. You have a true gift. A very creative mind. I thoroughly enjoyed reading this. If I were you, I wouldn't change a thing. Thank you for sharing this with all of us.

Well written. I'm sorry to see it end.

Well it is absolutely my best ever story no. 1 probabbly well written and i want another series higher than this one around 50 chapter . Because it is the best

I see 4 possible sequels - one for each ring, but as short stories.

What each person did during the first few months (or year).

Could be 4 different stories (to expand on later) OR just one with 4 major chapters.

Please??

What will the new chapters be called and so forth

I am very glad I stuck it out through the full story arc. The series is an example of excellent story-telling, which helped me get through the difficulties.

I am very happy that the author recruited an editor. While the editor did a good job, there were still problems with sentence structure, usage, and at times spelling. I cannot emphasize enough how important it is to avoid distractions like this. While a writer is aiming for a good story, the end-objective in the presentation still needs to be perfection (or as close as we can get it).

I found myself drawn into the story, and I cared for many of the characters - especially Mary, Candace, April, and Elizabeth. I found myself rooting for Chance, and I fell in love with Penny and Cynthia (by the way, I lost track of what happened to Cynthia; there was really only mention that Mark and Cynthia were no longer together).

The use of John D. Rockefeller was a great choice for plot device. While Dr. Zachary Smith seemed a little cliche to me, his character was well-developed through what I considered some of the more outrageous parts. His redemption seemed to really come in the climactic final chapters.

Overall, I would like to thank the author for an excellent read.

Well done on your story, well thought out and with good solid characters.

What I take exception to is the brand naming and product descriptions, it reminded me of the days of 'Payola' just call a Iphone6s a smart phone and a car 'a Car'. this type of mistake is usually by young males that have need to drop names.

Good work.

I loved to see about what happened with the other Four rings.

I want to know if John and April have kids.

I also what to know if any of the agents or rings also have kids.

This series is very good, not quite what we put in our favorites, but it dose get it's own reading list.

Four star for all but the final, which got five stars, manly because it has John and April finally getting married.

We were team April from the start and were quite upset when it looked like John wouldn't get together with her, very glade that it happened.

We were upset that you turned natural lesbians into bisexuals, but understand that it was somewhat necessary to do so, just not happy about it.

You did have some consistency errors where you seemed to forget things that had happened in previous chapters, this was quite frustrating.

Looking foreword to whatever stories you have that continue in this universe, hopefully they tie up the unanswered questions about what happened to some of the characters.

We would like to thank you for writing this,

Tanhors and family.

I thoroughly enjoyed the story, and I’m glad it’s come to a resolution. Although the writing and readability of the story were obviously improved by getting an editor, I had no difficulty reading it from the beginning. I do agree the the product placement can be a little distracting at times. Other than very high ticket items like vehicles and designer fashion, naming a model isn’t ‘necessary’. I personally am familiar with the Hermann Miller chair you named, and it’s my favorite, but to most it would be meaningless.

I read all of it. Glad I stuck with it at the start! I really enjoyed the concept! I just wish there was more of this story. I loved April and John. I think I need a ring of power. :D

I wish we knew what the rings actually were though..

Thank you for a beautifully written storey.

I will miss reading this tale.

Your writings remind me of the author Fern Michaels (sp) and her series called. The Sisterhood. Well written with fun anecdotes and with enough players to keep you interested and not boring. I truly enjoyed the chapters and your imagination to keep me entertained. I salute your skills and hope to read sequel to these wonderful people. Thanks for your skills

I was disappointed that there was no special attraction between John and his sister Heather

I wish John would have either punished or made April an anal virgin again. I am disappointed that April gave her anal cherry to a stranger, rather than to John. I am obviously more possessive than John.

Forget the people who were "disappointed ". The story was a great series and the plot was a very original one. Keep up the good work!!

I found this story by accident and that was all he wrote!! I was sucked into the storyline and when my iPad was stolen I simply couldn’t find it again until now. Please keep writing, I simply loved this story!!

I loved the series and John’s evolution. I look forward to seeing where these characters turn up next.

The story itself was entertaining, I actually skipped over some of the sex just to see what was going to happen next

Wow that is all I can say.ranks up with manny published authors I have read.

I randomly stumbled across this story and absolutely love it. I do have one question tho. Early on his father mentioned that that April wasn't his true love and then later when John first meets Penny they both feel a surge that neither fells with anyone else. They feel this surge several times. Were you meaning to at some point release April from John's control and have him destined to be with Penny? If not then what was that special click they had that no-one else did? Just curious. Also what happened to Evan and what was that experiment John was doing with him and why was he so much more powerful then the others? Or was that the experiment, to see if giving someone more power would corrupt them? but great story and now to check out your other works.

Very good read. Enjoyed ALL of it

Whatever happened to the bank embezzler. John said that he would fix that situation but it was just lost in the following chapters.

Great story 5 stars all the way, could not put it down!

Fantastic story, one of the best MC stories on the site, I think it grabs you right from the first couple of chapters. I hoped that the story would continue within the same vane but alas it is not to be.

5 stars all the way.

I love this story, it was more than a sex story to me, it was pure literature, and as an author myself I love this amazing talent, thanks for many months of entertainment.

Great story! Five star every chapter, hope there is a sequel coming!

I thought the overall story was fantastic. To watch John grow and become more confident was great. Can't wait to see what happens next.

Having just finished reading this again, I have a few observations that I found quite amusing. First of all the brief intro to Lafette Hubbard. I found the character very interesting and when Dr. Smith referred to him as L. Ron Hubbard ( scientology fame) and author of sci fi books it made perfect sense. Well done. Second, Dr. Zachary Smith. The way he started out as appearing to be helpful was good. When he started to show his ulterior motives I couldn't help but think of how much he reminded me of another Dr. Zachary Smith. The one from the old TV show Lost in Space. Both have very similar characteristics. Again, well played. I look forward to reading the next story with this great group of characters.

Once you found an editor the story got much better. Kudos.

This just got better and better. I'm usually not really into mind control stories, but after a bit wobbly start, you picked up the pace and prose.

Thank you, wise editor ✍️ 😉, together the pair of you made the series SOAR !!!!

Loved it, thanks again. And more, please, pretty please.

Bye ….. Absolutelywickedthoughts

Love and peace

Great job overall... I gave each chapter 5 ☆ There were a couple minor continuity errors here and there... like a character saying they had never been with another woman before, when they had two or three chapters earlier. But I stayed with it and was not disappointed.

A couple unanswered questions though... Why was Evan Johnny's "special project"? What was the unique connection between John and Penny? I thought for sure you'd reveal that these were other half siblings of Johnny's!! Children that Zachary did realize he had from one night stands years ago. Evan's mom was described in passing as being a "young single mother", Penny's background we don't know, but her being mentioned as a lighter skinned black woman would fit into her being another Smith offspring.

I know you have you haven't posted anything in a while.., hopefully you're still getting these reviews and will post more in the future.

Will keep checking back...

A damn good story. The evolution of your writing improved greatly as the story progressed, as did most of the lite errors.

The story was excellent. The characters had backgrounds and personalities. I do agree with a few readers that this story was incredibly involved at times and for some, that can be a bad thing based on confusion mostly but the author was able to keep things manageable and I think that was very difficult but it allowed the author to demonstrate imagination and an impressive ability to think outside the box. Thank you for creating and posting this wonderful tale and your other stories as well.

J.D.

You are an excellent writer!!! I literally don’t know what I’m gonna do now that it is over…….. perhaps I’ll actually get some work done!

Your imagination is vivid and very much look forward to reading more of your work! You should seriously consider turning this into an actual Novel series!! I think it would do very well!!

An excellent story, it had some minor errors but none that changed the story. It is one of the best things I've read on here. Look forward to reading more of your work.

I love this genre of story. Other than a few syntax or spelling errors, it was wonderful. MP

Great story, you had me fooled though. I thought we’d end up marrying Penny especially when he place the diamond. He was surprised with the colour when it wasn’t like the others. Plus when he took her for the first time the feeling he had for her wasn’t like the others. ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

Wow

Wonderful

Loose ends all tied up, Rings renamed and re-distributed, ... the recipients of the 'new' Rings were all fine choices, ... And they were the best choices you had without introducing a load of new characters late in the story, ... Thank you for this fun series, ... ;-) TTFN

Better story writing than most of the books I've paid for. You should consider writing as a career.

Great series.

Absolutely excellent story, thank you

Wow! What a story… read it all…this rather a book and apart from minor discrepancies super well written… incredible writing talent and characters we can feel and empathise with… truly enjoyed…thank you for the ride

An excellent story throughout. 5⛤

Excellent read although I had trouble keeping up with the long list of characters. Thank you for reminding us occasionally who the characters were. That helped tremendously. I look forward to reading more of your work and taking a new literary journey!

Excellent story! I agree that this is one of the best stories on Literotica. Early chapters definitely could use an editor though. 5 stars across the board.. The last few chapters, I tended to skip through the sex to get to the story.

Most amazing story I've ever read ! ! Absolutely loved it ! I wish there were more story's of this quality !

Thank you for a great story I really hope to see more from these characters

I enjoyed it very much thank you for a great story

I enjoyed it very much thank you. I agree that this is one of the best stories on Literotica. I hope you will follow up with the five main characters.

Bravo! One of the very best stories I've read, on or off Literotica

Excellent!

GREAT series! You are truly a gifted writer!

I really like this story, a lot. However, I thought the whole "Esmeralda" part was overly long. I also thought the whole tennis match was too long. BUT, I really did like this story.

Really great story, Loved how everything flowed, kept me wanting to read more