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by twelveoone07/02/04

I like this

I like this poet, he continues to show growth, although most of the lines could be improved on, he sets a complex tone and carries it off. Best line:
Red needles hang on skeletons

I fear that he may be handicapping himself with title choice,
this one is perfect here, but...
As an example, anyone reading this should read his so-called:
Stupid Sonnet, which if you get beyond the title is well worth it.

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by tarablackwood2207/03/04

I agree...

...this poet is showing all the earmarks of true growth. Tighter phrasing, sharper image, control of sentimentality. A far cry from the same poet's work not so long ago.

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by fawnie07/06/04

i thought..

it was a lovely poem. i too am learning how to chop out unnecessary words, sometimes i find it hard to do and still make it flow nice. i'm learning! keep writing, you do have much to say, this one sure speaks volumes.

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