This was a really good story, but I would have liked to see what happened with Eve and him when they finally got into bed together. But keep up the good work
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Anonymous07/06/04
It Fuckin Rocked!
I really liked this story. I know it's very weird and quite wrondg to do those things with your SISTER, but somehow, I found it VERY sexy and arousing! It made me so excited the way she tied him up and made him completely helpless and defenseless. And SHE had her way with HIM! I loved it!
But I want MORE sex scenes. MORE SEX! MORE MORE MORE!
I enjoyed it very much! You earn your spot on my favourite authors list each time!
by
Anonymous07/07/04
Boring!
Boring, never really gets to the point, to little twist. Sorry...
by
Anonymous10/08/04
Creative Work!
I like the part Giles woke up and everythings seemed like a dream but in fact it is a real fact!
Better if let the readers know how the Sis taught her brother to eat a pussy.
Nicely written. Not the usual fuck-and-run story, yet it was erotic nevertheless, as well as giving us a nicer view of incetuous relationahips. Well done!
Moonharp
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Anonymous04/30/05
V Sis
Great story - but when she tied his hands behind his back and laid him down again, he must have been SO uncomfortable.
Lukas
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Anonymous09/06/05
just too gud
a real gud work. congrats n giv us much more...
by
Anonymous03/23/06
Great
This was a great story.
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Anonymous09/21/06
So So
You wrote a good piece in general. Try to put yourself in the character's head before writing their dialogue, I mean what kind of nineteen year old says "Eve stood naked before me" out loud? Something like "she was standing there butt naked" would be more appropriate for a teenagers dialogue. When you get the little things right is when the big things come together
You took too long to get to the sex, and when you did it was over too quickly. Your characterization and dialogue were good, but hey, we don't come to a site like this for subtle discourse, we want to get straight to the fucking and sucking. Come on, don't be coy.
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Anonymous04/17/07
Brought tears to my eyes
It was a very sweetly writen story and although some just like a slam bam ty ma'am, I thought it could've of been a little slower before the sex came in but the characters were believable.
The way you had given Giles real pain and sorrow worked well and had me tearing up, as I'm pretty sure most people have had a disaster in their sex life, when the plan just didn't come off, leaving them feel foolish and miserable.
Hope to see more of your writing and I think the style is very good would love to read a longer story by you.
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Anonymous08/26/07
rape
nothing but sick rape story if this really happened the poor kid would probably be afraid of girl forever that is no way to lose your virginity he deffinetly would not be so happy in the morning and would not want to try to get together with eve for a long time if ever totally unrealistic try to keep it real not scifi
Don't understand what the guy below me is complaining about I would have love it if something like that happened to me and really I think the story is kinda cool but too short 3 pages or more would have been nicer but all the same thanks for writing quite set my imagination ablaze.
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Anonymous09/26/08
one of the best
i loved this story it was so well written and a nice erotic story my girlfreind and i would love to see more of your work
Your story brought back some old memories,and that was good because as we get older they can't take away our MEMORIES.
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Anonymous02/11/14
another simply lovely story
Lynn technically didn't rape Giles because he really did want it to happen. She did it to take the pressure off of him, to allow it to progress the way it should have with Eve. If she hadn't done so; it would have taken soooo much longer to get over the damage that was inflicted.
English
Oops
Thought I'd already commented on this one!!!
Great job. You're an outstanding author Oggy.
They just keep getting better!!!!! ;-)
Good story!
This was a really good story, but I would have liked to see what happened with Eve and him when they finally got into bed together. But keep up the good work
It Fuckin Rocked!
I really liked this story. I know it's very weird and quite wrondg to do those things with your SISTER, but somehow, I found it VERY sexy and arousing! It made me so excited the way she tied him up and made him completely helpless and defenseless. And SHE had her way with HIM! I loved it!
But I want MORE sex scenes. MORE SEX! MORE MORE MORE!
Very good.
I enjoyed it very much! You earn your spot on my favourite authors list each time!
Boring!
Boring, never really gets to the point, to little twist. Sorry...
Creative Work!
I like the part Giles woke up and everythings seemed like a dream but in fact it is a real fact!
Better if let the readers know how the Sis taught her brother to eat a pussy.
ONE OF THE BEST
One of the best stories I'v read on Literotica
Nicely written...
Nicely written. Not the usual fuck-and-run story, yet it was erotic nevertheless, as well as giving us a nicer view of incetuous relationahips. Well done!
Moonharp
V Sis
Great story - but when she tied his hands behind his back and laid him down again, he must have been SO uncomfortable.
Lukas
just too gud
a real gud work. congrats n giv us much more...
Great
This was a great story.
So So
You wrote a good piece in general. Try to put yourself in the character's head before writing their dialogue, I mean what kind of nineteen year old says "Eve stood naked before me" out loud? Something like "she was standing there butt naked" would be more appropriate for a teenagers dialogue. When you get the little things right is when the big things come together
Out of Balance
You took too long to get to the sex, and when you did it was over too quickly. Your characterization and dialogue were good, but hey, we don't come to a site like this for subtle discourse, we want to get straight to the fucking and sucking. Come on, don't be coy.
Brought tears to my eyes
It was a very sweetly writen story and although some just like a slam bam ty ma'am, I thought it could've of been a little slower before the sex came in but the characters were believable.
The way you had given Giles real pain and sorrow worked well and had me tearing up, as I'm pretty sure most people have had a disaster in their sex life, when the plan just didn't come off, leaving them feel foolish and miserable.
Hope to see more of your writing and I think the style is very good would love to read a longer story by you.
rape
nothing but sick rape story if this really happened the poor kid would probably be afraid of girl forever that is no way to lose your virginity he deffinetly would not be so happy in the morning and would not want to try to get together with eve for a long time if ever totally unrealistic try to keep it real not scifi
Cool
Don't understand what the guy below me is complaining about I would have love it if something like that happened to me and really I think the story is kinda cool but too short 3 pages or more would have been nicer but all the same thanks for writing quite set my imagination ablaze.
one of the best
i loved this story it was so well written and a nice erotic story my girlfreind and i would love to see more of your work
good
it was good and i enjoyed it
So EASY to relate
Your story brought back some old memories,and that was good because as we get older they can't take away our MEMORIES.
another simply lovely story
Lynn technically didn't rape Giles because he really did want it to happen. She did it to take the pressure off of him, to allow it to progress the way it should have with Eve. If she hadn't done so; it would have taken soooo much longer to get over the damage that was inflicted.
Thx;
DKP
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