This is well written - but I wish I hadn't read it! There isn't much 'nice' about it. She isn't quite forced into it, but she doesn't seem to enjoy it, either.
Lucas
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Anonymous07/16/04
I LOVED IT
I LOVED IT... HOPE THERE WILL BE MORE!
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Anonymous07/16/04
Good stuff but lacked a bit
it was alright but there wasnt so much real hard sex in it
I liked her control in the beginning and the switch.
esl
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Anonymous07/17/04
Perhaps later?
Excellent short seduction story, though you may have missed a chance of developing this into a group incestious sex story if they'd invited Rosa to join in.
A pleasure to read these delicate characterizations. Subtle strands of darkness, as if their future might be stormy and unpleasant, make it disturbing.
I like your style and the development of the characters, neither one of whom is particularly appealing. Nevertheless, the story is intriguing. You need to work on your continuity, though. Clarissa's hair is long and dark early in the story and miraculously becomes long and blonde later.
Really liked this story. Great use of subtle gestures, and I enjoyed the reality of the uncomfortable moments up to the point where Clarissa lays out her intentions. I would have liked to see her gradually take more control initially, when he is still unsure, but this may have been unrealistic considering her lack of experience. Also, I think it would be great to have more agonizing moments between mom and daughter about who he will fuck, maybe leading to the humiliation of one of them. This could be a subject of a follow-up story.
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Rainy - and dark!
This is well written - but I wish I hadn't read it! There isn't much 'nice' about it. She isn't quite forced into it, but she doesn't seem to enjoy it, either.
Lucas
I LOVED IT
I LOVED IT... HOPE THERE WILL BE MORE!
Good stuff but lacked a bit
it was alright but there wasnt so much real hard sex in it
Good stuff!
I liked her control in the beginning and the switch.
esl
Perhaps later?
Excellent short seduction story, though you may have missed a chance of developing this into a group incestious sex story if they'd invited Rosa to join in.
Excellent Story!
Clever and sexy, and featuring real people with real personalities. It's a pleasure to see characters with some depth and feeling for a change.
Very well written
A pleasure to read these delicate characterizations. Subtle strands of darkness, as if their future might be stormy and unpleasant, make it disturbing.
I like your style
I like your style and the development of the characters, neither one of whom is particularly appealing. Nevertheless, the story is intriguing. You need to work on your continuity, though. Clarissa's hair is long and dark early in the story and miraculously becomes long and blonde later.
Nice tension
Really liked this story. Great use of subtle gestures, and I enjoyed the reality of the uncomfortable moments up to the point where Clarissa lays out her intentions. I would have liked to see her gradually take more control initially, when he is still unsure, but this may have been unrealistic considering her lack of experience. Also, I think it would be great to have more agonizing moments between mom and daughter about who he will fuck, maybe leading to the humiliation of one of them. This could be a subject of a follow-up story.
im glad you liked what you saw......
mmmmm,....it's good to be older....
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