The Cumming Of Lisa

hello transfix

Thanks for sharing your words. :) I hope you don't mind a few suggestions. I see a few spots that really jumped out at me. Nothing major, just tiny, insignificant things. But I'll mention them anyway. Who knows, you may use these suggestions in the future. :)

"Silken ropes do bound my hands,
I am not able,
Silken threads do bound my legs,"

I think I'd drop do. Just go with "silken ropes bound my hands" and "silken threads bound my legs."


"I feel a-wetness underneath,"

You probably don't need a dash between "a" and "wetness."

"My cunt does ache,
It feels okay,"

Do you think "okay" is strong enough? After a good romp, don't you feel better than okay? I know I do. lol

Again, thanks for sharing your poem.