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by Anonymous

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by WickedEve07/13/04

you have a lot to say in this poem

but I'd really love to know more. I want to feel what you're saying. All I know is that there was a broken marriage, broken home and abuse. It's awful and it's sad. It does happen often and it happens everywhere. But make this poem more personal. Give me the story behind the broken marriage and abuse. Tell me about the person, about her personal situation. Details will only strengthen your work.

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by LeBroz12/01/06

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A potent mix
Of life's cruel tricks;
Agree with W.E. - a judicious add-on
Of a few details could give this piece
Powerful impact.

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by duddle14602/10/07

Time.

Time changes everything ~ sometimes for the better.

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by tazz31707/15/12

NO MATTER THE DARKNESS OF LIFE

with the morrow begins a new lite. TK U MLJ LV NV

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