All Comments on 'The Housewife Next Door'

I apologize if there are any errors on this. I was in a time crunch when writing it, and wanted to get it done before the real world intruded.

It was a good quick story. Totally get you were rushed. Keep it up.

...it gets ya every fucking time!

One of the better quickies I've read in the last couple of months. It deserves five stars, but is only getting four because the punctuation errors drove me to fury. Running a story through spellcheck to catch obvious mistakes is a start, but it is only a start. You actually have to sit down and READ it slowly -- proofread it, in other words. Even then, you may miss a few things. But this many mistakes in punctuation means only one of two things: Either you don't understand proper punctuation; or you're too lazy to do it right.

I don't care how much of a hurry you are in; take the time to read proof so your readers aren't pulled out of your story, and punctuate it properly. You owe that to yourself, and to us.

I think I should've probably not tried to write this on a day I didn't have proper time to write it. It's clearly been explained by those in the comment section (for which I thank you all sincerely I really do) that lack of time to proof read it, fix errors, punctuation mistakes, was this story's flaw. For that I will do my damn best to go over everything I write in the future better. Not writing when I don't really have the time for it is probably the first no-no lol. Thank you everyone for your comments and complaints. They have helped a lot.

Short and sweet. Edit please.

I agree about you needing an editor.

There are quite a few grammatical and spelling errors.

A good quick one...surprisingly I saw that ending coming.

10/10!!!!!