You have some great phrases here. I love this:
Retire to bed
rest in generations? arms
those before you
knew all this too
full of sights and sounds...
I can imagine it all right down to the smell of furniture wax and the ticking of a grandfather clock
....I remember what this looked like at the beginning...you did an incredible job letting it ripen and making it as strong as it is.
i'm too young for the good old days, but this brings back memories of squeeky stairs. lol
enjoyable and well constructed poetry.
much enjoyed, the phrasing is really superb. Thank you!
You described this so vividly, bringing out smiles and warnings, nostalgic and heartwarming. Thank you.
It's like at Christmas &
To Grandmother's house we go.
This poem was mentioned in the Archival Review thread, in a picking through Lit's archive of over 34,000 poems.
Reminescent of times past ~ made more clear by the beautiful metaphorical references.
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