All Comments on 'Mine, All Mine Ch. 02'

You've nailed it again. Even though I've read the story probably four or five times, I've just read it word for word again...fantastic dialogue..

Btw,lucky that beam is there ...or they wouldn't be able to climb down :-)

We don't have to wait too long for more!

Excellent work! So glad you are posting this story here. I absolutely love your writing!!!!!!

Thanks for posting your story here. I absolutely love both your writing style and your characters. I didn't see the twist with Amy coming. What a b..ch!! Off to read the next chapter.

As your other fans have said, the dialogue is perfectly suited to each of the characters, making them seem completely real and believable. Also, I don't like Amy very much...

Just like in your chapter 3 of Bass-Ackwards, you made the act of a blow-job (bro-job) the most erotic act imagineable to the extent that the description had the effect of placing a male reader as the recipient. Made me wish I was Ian at that moment! My reaction underscores your ability as an author. Not only for your excellent handling of dialogue and character description, but for placing the reader IN the story, not just as an observer. BTW, I hope your move was successful and stress-free.

Somehow you have a way of making your story perfectly readable and relatable. I am honestly blown away at how many times I stopped reading and said "Holy Shit, that sentence was perfect."

If you aren't already, I HIGHLY recommend trying to get published somewhere, if that is a desire of yours. Your books would sell incredibly well, if what you've written on Literotica is any reference to what your book would look like.

Bra-Fucking-Va.

Great writing, though I’m not seeing the BDSM thing anywhere near the horizon. That text was way cold from anyone who cared at all.

“all the shadows were now huddling underneath their casters, doing their shady best to avoid the bake of summer.”

Just an example, and a throw-off. Nice.

Excellent story. I love how you blend erotica with romance. Like a dessert with just the right amount of frosting. Beautiful.