Loved the build up, to the age old fantasy for us older fellas. Great descriptions of the sexual acts plus the lead up by the young nubile. Can't wait to read the sequel.
Well done!
Very good description of the middle age wife. She is hot as well. You will need to do the same description on the baby sitter when you get around to it.
I gave you a '75'. It is a well written story, but is incomplete. I never give a '100' unless there is an ending and the victim ends up preggie.
Enid needed to be fucked. You did not show that. That makes the story incomplete, so it is not known how you should expect a higher score?
The entry is good, and the continuation up to the end is good, but as I mentioned above, the story is incomplete. Perhaps you are going to continue this story, but until you do, I think it wrong for you to expect much of a higher score than what I've given you. And if you really want a good score, Enid will not only get fucked, but she will get bred.
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great job
claps* well done can't wait to read more!
Oh, Yeah! More, more, more.
Great story, nicely written and woven together. Very, very Hot! Please do a follow-up soon.
Naughty and tittilating
Erotic and humorous.
excellent beginning.... please keep it going!!
a great start to an age-old fantasy for us middle aged guys... please write more soon.
Awesome
I want more
Excellent!
Loved the build up, to the age old fantasy for us older fellas. Great descriptions of the sexual acts plus the lead up by the young nubile. Can't wait to read the sequel.
Well done!
Very well done
Very good description of the middle age wife. She is hot as well. You will need to do the same description on the baby sitter when you get around to it.
An Erotic Ending is needed on this one....
I gave you a '75'. It is a well written story, but is incomplete. I never give a '100' unless there is an ending and the victim ends up preggie.
Enid needed to be fucked. You did not show that. That makes the story incomplete, so it is not known how you should expect a higher score?
The entry is good, and the continuation up to the end is good, but as I mentioned above, the story is incomplete. Perhaps you are going to continue this story, but until you do, I think it wrong for you to expect much of a higher score than what I've given you. And if you really want a good score, Enid will not only get fucked, but she will get bred.
can't wait
great story can't wait for next chapter.
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WOW! Going to read the next one now. :)
Tbis made me soo horny. I wish i was enid. I wouldve fucked the shit out of him!!!
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