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Hotrod Beatdown, Redline Fairytale

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by Anonymous

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by perks07/24/04

perkspective

I don't use the rating thermometers.
My perkspective on your poem is posted in the poetry forum on the new poems thread.

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by WickedEve07/24/04

okay, it's a really good poem

but that title... wow. Talk about an attention grabber. :)

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by tarablackwood2207/25/04

I find...

...a lot here to like -- clear thought and clever phrasing abound -- I think the line breaks, however, are poorly considered, and the punctuation inconsistent to the point of being rushed. This is a very strong poem, I think, in need of another rewrite to make it even stronger.

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