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by Anonymous

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by BlueskyBeauty07/25/04

bouncing babies!

clever little metaphor tt.

xx

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by twelveoone07/25/04

To the point!

this line seems out of place, birth? Is so, that part should be developed further, everything else works fine as Bic.
"you cramped"

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by WickedEve07/25/04

I'd drop the cramped part

other than that, good poem.

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