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BlueskyBeautyBlueskyBeautyover 19 years ago
bouncing babies!

clever little metaphor tt.

xx

twelveoonetwelveooneover 19 years ago
To the point!

this line seems out of place, birth? Is so, that part should be developed further, everything else works fine as Bic.

"you cramped"

WickedEveWickedEveover 19 years ago
I'd drop the cramped part

other than that, good poem.

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