All Comments on 'Car Trouble'

by CTrei

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greeneyelovegreeneyeloveover 19 years ago
GREAT

A wonderful story that is a true deight. Great job.

BlackShanglanBlackShanglanover 19 years ago
Good work with the premise

This is a tricky premise to work with because it crops up a fair bit, but I think that you did nice work with it. I enjoyed the fine line you walked between consensual and non-consensual, and the ending is intriguing and makes me want to see more of where this is going. I also liked the little detail of the scent of roses - teasingly interesting.

If I would change one thing, it's that his use of "love" becomes quite overt at times and a little distracting. I'd be tempted to cut back a little. Still, it's a pleasant read.

HughJardHughJardover 19 years ago
very nicely done

a very nicely done piece of writing leaves the reader wanting more. i truly enjoyed it. thank you.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 17 years ago
Wow

Very good writing. Great detail and characters. I'm thinking about a chapter 2.

HisLittleOneHisLittleOneabout 16 years ago
Stunning

I loved this story. Very nicely written!

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