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by CTrei

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 16 years ago
Breathtakingly Beautiful

This short story may not be as explicit as many of the others that I have read, but I have to admit that it is gorgeous. I love the descriptive, and your use of grammar makes the prose worth reading. Many of the works that I have read are all over the place due to a lack of consistency, but yours has overshadowed them all thus far. You have a gift for building up the intensity without heavy reliance on key words that I will refer to as Arousal Indicators, but it works because you don't need to use them to draw the reader into the sexual experience. All in all, a great read and I look forward to reading more of your work.

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