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Superior literary craftmanship
Occasionally one comes across a story that is both well crafted in terms of its story line and its developmental topography (how the story unfolds with valleys and peaks). To couple that with excellent word-smithery makes it a real delight to read. This is a story that I will save. Well done!
Bravo con passione!
It's amazing how you establish such a wonderful character in Arturo and his decade of longing in so brief a time. The sex is poignant and hot. Bravo!!!
Absolutely
terrific!!! I love this story. Your whole development of the area, characters, everything was perfect.
I cannot say anything else but thank you, thank you very much.
George
Beautiful...
Your command of language is evident. The story was captivatingly romantic. I want to offer the kind of critical advice I would respect of my own work. "Pussy lips" and "cock" didn't work for me. I was in another world with your words, a magical place that was subtle and elegant. It was like snippets of a porn flick cutting in on grand cinemagraphic masterpiece.
I can tell you have the talent to write graphic and hot sex scenes with beautiful words. I would love to see you try.
C.C. Rider
Wonderful...
I am in awe of your talent. I hung onto every word and ached for more. Just fantastic.
Bravo
This is superbly written, extremely appealing to me as someone who enjoys sex and soccer. I am reminded of the writing style of Gabriel Garcia Marquez, one of the great authors of the 20th century. Bravo!
Poetic
I loved the way the story flow. In some instances I felt as if I was reading a poem. Very well written.
A delicately crafted tale
You write with the discipline of an author who has a long history of being ruthless with paring away the unnecessary and leaving the fine details of what first appears to be a simple sketch. Upon closer inspection, what seems a simple tale proves to be a master's work. I presume that you are a published author or one that should be and hope that you will grace us with more from your pen. The erotic, as some one pointed out before me, read as a poem, or if I may, a lyric, as I could feel the melody and the harmony.
Quality tale
My bowler is off to you.
Beautifully written, a wonderful wonderful tale
Please continue to grace us with your talent?
Left me pondering humbly...
Beautiful... truly beautiful. So poignant, so sad, and yet stunning. Thankyou.
I'm so glad I found this story!
Beautifully written. So well crafted that I felt what was going on without an unnecessary abundance of words. Thank you for sex and football, two of my favourite pastimes.
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