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by jakk07/31/04

what the fu**

and i said: learn how to write this style is just shitty i dont usually rip on others but this was horrable. i mean the she said: lets dance then he said: ok . it just dosnt work.

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by 07/31/04

The style was ok, in a off-beat kinda way.

Boy, that's a hellova office environment you created there!

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by hathorbr101/20/12

Sorry, but it needs work!

I really wanted to like your story, but it just didn't have the flow that most stories had. Next, get an editor and see if that helps a little. But great effort, though!

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