by Blulady
It's the best story on Literotica, honestly. I'm truly addicted to it and it get's me hot with passion. Get it on, Blulady!
Absolutely amazing, even better than the first chapter. I can't wait to read more of your work!
Interrogation for a name with orgasm denial as the torture is one of my particular favorite devices. Well done.
The ideas in this story are great, very hot. The writing is really pretty bad though, it certainly isn't doing justice to the story. I would recommend utilizing literotica's editing services. Generally I'm fine with mediocre writing if the story is good, but there are so many mistakes and poor word choices that it really detracts from the story. On the plus side, it's very clear that you have everything it takes to be a fantastic author, you just need a little help to get there, as we all do.
Your detailing of the sex reveals your adeptness at writing overall.
please write more of women spread eagle against their will but getting excellent "foreplay",a patriarcal prudish term,
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twice in that story you used the word "one" meaning a singular item instead of the word "won" I had enjoyed the first story, but having this error in two places is distracting and unprofessional.
this Story is simply hot hot hot. i think every womans wet dream is it to be interrogated by a Alpha male like talos.:) 5 fat stars.