All Comments on 'Verna the Ponygirl'

... but I had to re-read several of the story's sentences to parse out their meaning. The culprits are 'run-on sentences' (solved by breaking them up into more sentences) and under-use of punctuation (in addition to commas, using semi-colons and dashes for pauses between phrases).

I still voted 5 stars; the story as a whole moved well, didn't see any misspellings, and this really appeals to my kink.

Thank you, and please write more.

Very well done. I like your universe. How do Luke and Verna evolve?

Please add more, I love this story.

I hope you continue with it.

This is what we want to see in a pony story. How she feels, how she interacts with the men in charge of her. Let me say again because I cannot emphasize it enough, that we ponygirl lovers lost a great man when SirJeff retired.

Well, absolutely loved the theme of the story. An owner that understands the value of trust with a sub. Trust is what binds the two together. The sub will understand that the owner (master) will not harm the sub beyond their limits, and the dom knows what the sub can do and will push those limits because the owner will not bring harm to their sub. Vander knows how much to push Verna and will control how she reacts. He allows her petulance but only to a point that will cause her great submission but does not go beyond that. 5 Stars for this chapter.