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I gave you a five
Although, I think you could have really worked this one more. She was a shallow character who didn't utter a sound.
The end was good. If you continue, you could really build up her character and the emotions she goes through carrying the demon's child. Maybe bring in a few of the shape-shifters or others that maybe escape the gates of Hell and wreak havoc on earth.
Maybe expand the story so it's longer than a page. You have the beginning of a good series if you care to carry it further.
First attempt was a good start. Good job. ;-)
GREAT FUCK STORY..but
Please add a chapter where the demon returns to ravage her pregnant body.
There has to be more
Please add more to this. I enjoyed the Story but felt there could have been more.
meh
wasn't that good, add some foreplay, get her worked up and horny and wanting it, don't just have her "instantly wet", not that realistic
dumb
This was dumb
Chosen?
Good story...was she pregnant by the one who raped her or by the other three demons in the room after he left? Did he return to continue raping her over and over again? This is a need to know.
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