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by jd4george08/06/04

I wish I had thought to write this!

Or, to be so inspired to explore that speed where other racer's faces disappear! I also enjoyed the "tribute dedication" at the end:

"If emotions raced,
I'd win,
and you wouldn't
understand
why."

Nice job!

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by Tathagata08/06/04

This

~Concentration and
smooth-fast looks
over the shoulder.
Ideological blind-
spots can't be
checked.~

Is a great stanza.

And the ending/ dedication is very cool.

You lose the manic drive a little
I'm not sure if it's the length or language
It races then slows then races again
see if cutting a verse or two out maintains it
You have a lot of promise...I like your work alot

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by LeBroz11/26/07

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This poem was mentioned in the Archival Review thread, in a picking through Lit's archive of over 38,000 poems.



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