by ChuckEPoo
This was engaging and I agree it was somewhat predictable. However I think you designed it that way. The characters ae well defined. a solid five for a great beginning.
Okay, you're 50, and the short marriage didn't work out. Your young partner seems to be a real looker, and you could find a bit of entertainment with her. Take her shirt off, have her take your shirt off, just hopefully you're a hairy chested man, and get at it. Have some fun together!
Great start. It left me wanting more. The characters are well defined. 5
The description of the characters, the settings (Chubb'ys), the dialogue, the clothing, the dancing, the fight, the flight, the undressing, and Franks inner thoughts. The murder/suicide scene was realistic, and it appears that Alex is a better detective than Frank. The request for her to go undercover was an interesting twist. Well written beginning to a much longer story.