Maybe I'm wrong (I've been wrong before) but I'm only giving this chapter 75. It's not that your writing skills have diminished (Your still a damn good writer) but the story itself is getting a little far fetched.
I'm totally in love with Chrysta (I loved exhibitionists) but a story needs credibility too. It's a very tough thing to do. I know, since I'm already starting to fuck up my own series of stories, but just because I do it doesn't make it right.
If we both calm down and use sex scenes in the story as an added enticement for the reader, instead of writing a story where the sex scenes are the purpose of the story, I think we could write a more erotic story.
Like I began, I might be wrong. MY stories have elicited very little comment from the readers, so.....?
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Maybe I'm wrong
Maybe I'm wrong (I've been wrong before) but I'm only giving this chapter 75. It's not that your writing skills have diminished (Your still a damn good writer) but the story itself is getting a little far fetched.
I'm totally in love with Chrysta (I loved exhibitionists) but a story needs credibility too. It's a very tough thing to do. I know, since I'm already starting to fuck up my own series of stories, but just because I do it doesn't make it right.
If we both calm down and use sex scenes in the story as an added enticement for the reader, instead of writing a story where the sex scenes are the purpose of the story, I think we could write a more erotic story.
Like I began, I might be wrong. MY stories have elicited very little comment from the readers, so.....?
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