by FutaWriter
This is a great story! Maybe your later stories could be a bit longer, but this is still good!
A great concept but I definitely want more detail. As it is I feel like I barely had time to get into the story before it was over.
Definitely could use some more details when it gets into the thick of things (pun intended). Looking forward to your future stories :)
Love the way the story is going. However I would enjoy it a lot more if you added more detail to the story as a whole.