All Comments on 'Geezer Man Says'

I like this, alot. Your use of repetition is masterful:

This takes it to the breaking point:

"slinging the same food

on the same plates

for the same family

of the same restaurant

for the same pay"

"pot roast" and "fucking assholes" repetitions lend a wonderful song like quality to this.

on what helps turn a virile young man into a washed out old wannabe. Very clever contrasting. Good work.

*thermometer still in the meat. the red meat.

bravo! you kept me right on the edge of disturbed, keeping my eyes open wide enough to keep letting it all in unprotected. that is a compliment. this is a good poem.

'cause he's got a red ?vette

and he's got a red mustang

and some other car the color of red meat

very clever

Great poem but no thermometers and now I don't remember why. Give me some red meat.

at a few resturaunts..

I know this man well.

You captured him perfectly

Nice style, great pacing

at a few restaurants..

I know this man well.

You captured him perfectly

Nice style, great pacing

I think we've all been guilty of being a grumpy ol' geezer at one time or another. You captured the emotions to a 'T'.

I'll take chicken thanks ;-)

This poem was selected from Lit's archive of over 39,500 poems for inclusion in today's Archival Review.<br>

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