All Comments on 'Serva Capta Ferum Victorem Cepit'

The second ending was MUCH better!

Good job!

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Is Scottland, not Rome

Don't try to pack too much into a sentence, this becomes bewildering:

"Quintus Aelius Corax was born a slave. Though he only wore that title for a day his father's master, a very successful merchant from Augusta Taurinorum freed him and his family on the day of his birth. Fifth born son, third to survive boyhood, to a freed slave, Quintus turned to the legions as a way to advance in life."

I nearly stopped reading at this point.

What is the cognaomen Corax and why would his black hair have anything to do with earning it?

I stopped here.

I don't read to anonymous comments, sorry, if you don't have the balls to use a user name to comment I don't consider your comments worth while!

Very engaging characters wrapped up in historical context (which was utilized quite well). I would have been completely satisfied with the original ending. That you added an HEA...very sweet.