by Pet_my_Kitten
I encourage you to continue writing no matter if your "critics" praise or condemn. Your style is rookie-ish but readable with a likable story.
My personal wonder: you say you're into girls (you're gay and apologize to us fellas) BUT you use a liberally-lubed dildo to make yourself cum. It appears there's a man at the bottom of this mystery.
Please continue writing. As a child I loved reading Sherlock Holmes mysteries and your mystery begins with a paradox. Thanks for posting something I like.