All Comments on 'KYNK Ch. 02'

Very nicely done, Pastel. I like your pacing. I like Ezra's pov. I feel what is happening to him. The balance you've created for Elliott is powerful, just continue to be very careful and aware of how you portray him. Right now he is aloof and human, mysterious and simple, presumptuous and caring. It works because there is balance. I want to be angry at him but can't sustain it.

really like the ambience

Thank you so much for the feedback and remarks on this! I honestly love hearing about the impressions of a character. With him, it's always been a matter of definitely portraying his desire for control, but to also portray that he desires Ezra himself, first and foremost. Elliott isn't perfect, surely, but I'm glad that he is seen as *human*. That's definitely very important to me!

I'm glad that the pacing has also worked well. I read over and tweak each chapter what feels to be a hundred times before I post it. Especially when it comes to considering how their relationship will evolve over the course of the story.

Thank you again so much for the remarks thus far!

- J

Hey this is a really great story it's easy to see the inspiration and my only worry is that you'll make the same mistake as the previous one. I hope that you have an actual knowledge of the subject your writing about and do it justice. Other than that your characters are believable and I can't wait to see the next installment. 88