All Comments on 'I Used My Work Belt'

Welcome and thank you for your first story. It is a solid, sexy piece. I would just slowing down your action and giving more descriptions of everyone's reactions as things happen. That's important for pulling the reader in, and keeps the scene from becoming just a list of things done.

Try to find someone to beta read for you. It's difficult to catch all of your own mistakes. At one point you have him 'searching' for his cock. I hope you meant to write 'reaching.' If he's having to search for it, that's a different category of story.