by BigGuy33
Very powerful story and very well written. Thanks for posting it. Even those who have had a tremendous loss can overcome them with love.
Terribly emotional; a true heart breaker for those who are empathetic.
Very touching depiction of the anguish the main character felt, and a very
uplifting story of human kindness and caring. Enjoyed ot, even if I did cry !!!
Dude... Don't know what to say. You rock. This was a very emotional story for me. I bawled my eyes out. Thank you for writing it...
With this story you have joined the the very small "club" of the very best writers on this site. I've read a lot of very emotionally driven stories and this one stands out not only for the sensitive way you've portrayed this tragic situation, but in the grace and skill of your writing.
I can see the TTT basis and your story is as good if not better than TTTs story. I also would give a 10 if I could.
One of the best stories I've read on this site by one of the best writers. I've always enjoyed your Loving Wives stories, but this was something special. Thank you.
To pluck the heartstrings, but did you need to use both hands and put your back into it too?! Oh, that reminds me that we need to go pick up some more Kleenex...
Physics tells us that some of the (simplified) laws of nature are reflected in equations like f=ma and p=mv. You have shown us another such, if distantly related, law of the universe. Broken and shattered hearts cannot be mended easily, but even with the most traumatic of heartwrending causes; mending remains possible...if we but allow for it. First comes the grief and all its necessary stages, but after that can come, if not a mending into its previous state, then a rebuilding into a new state of wholeness.
Well done tale of essential truths of the heart and soul.
Personally, I could have done without the blasphemy - but who else was he going to be angry with but God given his circumstances? Nosey neighbors? Maybe, but that would have been small-minded at best. His neighbors served him very well, once they got their own fears and stupidity out of their collective way.
This is truly one of the best stories to come down the pike in ages. Thanks for sharing it with us.
I loved how Cary when she realised how grievous was his pain and nightmares.
Went with her husband's blessing to help him sleep.
All in a real world sense.
...if we all had people like that in our lives to watch our backs.
You said it would be dark. That wasn't dark. That was beautiful.
Definitely, something new and creative from BigGuy33.
At least for us readers more familiar with his LW stories.
Characters clearly defined. Dialogue sensible, simple and to the point. An idea that I haven't seen before on this site. I was happy not to see a 'got you' from the Henry character.
Really a very entertaining story and a new plot. Kudos to you BigGuy33 👏👏.
AMerryman
Tear-jerkingly wonderful. One of the best I have ever read.
Thank you for sharing your writing with us.
PaulFelly
Very nice story.
Minor typo - After the storm, when Selma stayed the weekend and they had dinner with Victor's family, you said "Victor and Selma," not "Victor and Liz."
I don't know why the wives didn't clue the husbands in, they were more likely to say the wrong thing if they DIDN'T know what was going on than if they didn't.
I thought that Selma was going to show up and talk him of the roof.
While I accept that it's the characters' belief, my non-belief had a hard time with the God, Heaven and Hell stuff. Even if I DID believe, I don't understand the need to go to the cemetery; isn't Heaven everywhere?
A touch maudlin, and I wish he showed a bit more strength, but we are all flawed creatures.
Nicely done.
bit depressing and a bit romantic for me. i was hoping the brash party girl monique was gonna take him in hand and fuck him back into rude health and mental wellbeing.
long ago a "rough diamond" of a girl did that for me.
nice story though.
Nice compliment to tx tall tales. Not ashamed to say you got as many tears out of me as he did. No sure I can come back to this one again. Very powerful. Thank you.
Absolutely wonderful story. I cried all through this story. It was so damn good. Thanks for the story. See, they can put out a story where no one gets cuckolded. And people love this. See.
BigGuy can write. Redemption on multiple levels. Well done.
... at the cemetery scene, though I was close to tears throughout most of the story.
Absolute 5-Stars-plus
BG, outstanding writing. I have seen the horrors of war and death, but the Cemetary and scenes of Henry challenging God were tear jerkers.
A very compelling story, well written. With so many messages, don't judge a book by its cover, assuming makes an ass out of you and me, Love Thy Neighbor. Even though I don't really care for mine now, I've had ones in the past that I've considered family. It's what the world needs. If anyone reads this and does not have a tear form in their eye, they are not human.
It brought a tear to my eye a couple of times. But I enjoyed it. A lot. Just one comment if I may. At the end, the author mentioned that he pondered over which category to post the story in. In my opinion, it should have been posted under “Fantasy”. Because I don’t think that there’s a neighborhood in this country, or maybe the world, that would band together and help a hurting guy like Henry. I guess I’m just a cynic. Hell, I know I am. Great story, though.
Unless one has ever had to bury their child that person can never know the grief and pain of wanting to be with their child or children instead of living without them.
Fathers are supposed to protect their children. That hit me so hsrd.
Raging at God? Yep. It happens. We are not Job. We don't take this loss quietly and blameless. We are driven insane by the questions: why did you allow this to happen? Why did you take MY CHILD?
Curses and rage fill the void of the unanswered questions. The whispered answers are seldom heard.
It does take replacement love to help heal. To continue to stay on this Earth. To stop asking the questions as often. To stop blaming yourself daily. To continue to exist.
Until we hopefully see them again.
Thanks again for the tale, BigGuy.
Be at peace, my Son.
We’ll wriiten and heart wrenching. If you didn’t shed a tear for Henry, you are not human. One of the best on this site and it would be a fantastic read on any literary website. Well done.
...fun to read, occasional ungrammatical (i suppose vernacular) english. Obsession with making babies, plus the god mumbo jumbo I´ll never understand. Thanks for the story.
She'd make an excellent executive of one sort or another. Big heart, smart, personable, thoughtful, quick... Damn!
Such a heartfelt story. Sitting here crying my eyes out. Just went and hugged my kids.
Thank you
Wow, that was a definite tear jerker. Great story - thanks for writing.
Such a sad tale .. I was a fireman for 31 years and I was like a Christmas card always greeting (crying for those that don't know Scottish) well done and beautifully written.
Just amazing!! Brought tears to my eyes. One of the absolute best stories on Literotica!!! Thank you for sharing it with us!!!!
Special loving neighbors like they used to be everywhere. I was surprised there wasnt some big coming out for Halloween. With the gifting of candy.
This one's right up there with Bandit and September Blue.
Two of my all time favorites.
Beautifully written.
Once and a while I read a LIT.com story that strikes very close to home. I am talking memories. When my wife of 44 yrs died from the big "C" I was crushed. Even though I had many years with my love I still wasn't ready. I went through all the things a person usually goes through, the grief, and all the symptoms a big loss conjure up. The one I most remember was the ANGER. I did the same t-storm thing Henry went through but at the top of a mountain. I waved my walking stick at God and dared him to take me, I cussed and called him nasty names and challenged him to take me out. She was so deserving to stay alive and I was such a stupid non deserving clod, I was just SO pissed. I got soaked and lost my voice for several days from screaming so much and got a nice cold but shit I am still here. That was almost 4 yrs ago and I still shake my fist and single digit at God once and a while.
We had a long and happy life together so I cannot imagine what it would be like to lose a whole family so sudden and tragically. I just cannot imagine. KUDOS for a great story.
A few commenters indicated they were uncomfortable with the cursing directed towards God. Only once in my life have I felt so bereft and in such emotional anguish that I also, strongly and repeatedly, cursed to God, much like in the story here. Fortunately, my emotional pain passed with no retribution from the Almighty.
Very believable if you have suffered a great emotional burden such as this character has. Poignant and touching. Very well done!.
U problems seem so small now. I am here after Medflight, a stroke during the ride and waking up five days later in 2014. I'm still not sure of my fate but strive to do better and be more helpful each day.
If he (I’m assuming you mean protagonist) showed much more there would be that much less of a story, no?
...to let her be so close, physically and emotionally, to Henry.
Just too many TTT stories for me to go through.
1 in 5 give this story 4 stars or less? Should be more like 4.92-stars
I liked the story, really. But I was on edge the entire time that Cara was so close to Henry. I would not have wanted my wife to sleep beside him to keep him calm. If so I would be in a chair in the room eyes wide open. Then with all the mothering she did and the hospital stay? Why not the neighbors all take turns. That would be better and I would feel better. If there hadn't been a Selma available who knows where the relationship could have gone.
"He clung to her like a drowning victim grasps a life preserver, and the metaphor wasn't far off."
That's not a metaphor. It's a simile.
When something is "like" another thing, it's a simile.
When something is something else it's a metaphor.
I'm trying to make this simple, and probably failing.
The wild horses of the surging sea galloping onto the shore - that's a metaphor.
if this story does not get to you then the surgeon will be over to do your heart transplant
One of the best "stories" on here. You should write these type more often.
One of your best yet. Thank you. It was very touching and moving. 5 stars.
The neighbors started off as crappy people but turned out to be damn angels in the end. Also when they first met I got where they were coming from but going at him like they did was out of line. Great 5 Stars
So excellent of a read! I got emotional with this story. Such great writing. Thank-you!
Not worth the time. For a tearjerker story the plot is lacking, for a romance the romance is lacking.
On a side note, the neighbours, especially the bitch Cara, are the stereotypical Americans. Loud, obnoxious, can't keep their nose out of your business and always think to now better what you want/need.
In short: annoying as fuck and without hope for redemption.
You write some of the most emotional stories on this site. At 73 years old I needed a box of tissues to soak up my tears. Daft ain't it. You just hit so many realistic subjects that I am disappointed that you're readers just don't understand. While you keep writing I'll keep reading. Thank you so much.
A brilliantly written story. I unashamedly wept through half of it as I'm sure anyone who has lost a partner or child in tragic circumstances. You brought out the survivors feelings of helplessness and guilt, as you ALWAYS blame yourself in some way even if you weren't there at the time. Always the "what if" questions in your head that never go away! 5* just does not seem enough!!!
I’ve come back to this story four or five times and even though I know how it turns out, I shed tears every single time I read it. It’s astonishingly good. The plot holds together very well and the characters are very believable. Henry’s argument with God puts you right in the middle of the storm with all the neighbors.
I am continually amazed at the quality of the stories that many Lit authors put out there for free for people to enjoy. I only wish I had the talent to write and the bravery to put a bit of myself out there.
Great story; thanks. What doesn't quite ring true is why Henry bought a house in a neighborhood with so many children if he didn't want to be reminded of what he lost. In a similar situation, I would be leasing an apartment or buying a condo in an adults only neighborhood but maybe that's just me...
Wow, that was so good. Not a believer but I can see how he needed that to help him move on. 5*
One of My best friends lost his wife to a drunk driver . She was 6 months pregnant . Both of them Died that Sorry Night in September . Naturally the Drunk Driver lived . But He Never goes anywhere alone . Seems like he got beat up a few times . Both times we were at a Casino that had Cameras everywhere . First thing to say when arrested is Lawyer . I would have moved from that Neighborhood . I Know all of My Neighbors and they know Me
A heart tugging, teary eyed story. Very well written and worthy of more than 5 stars.
Without a doubt this is your best work. There is nothing I as a reader would want to fault, you capture the very essence of the characters pain and the community compassion. Once again well done
Most of the comments are naturally positive, the few that are not have that head-in-ass syndrome going on. Thanks for a touching tale!
somewhere east of Omaha
Having the name of a violent movie series may not have been my first choice, especially being in non-erotic.
Beautiful story, so well written, thank you sharing, It brought tears to my eyes.
Normally seeking LW, snd somewhat BTB, for cause, I have tended not to read Rom. or N-E. This was nearly stellar. With better authors, such as yourself, I will expand my readings. They also have value which I can use.
awful misery, stopped at the second page. I'm reading through the list, some very good, some not so good but 'heart-break' no thanks.
Masterful…anyone who claims this isn’t worth reading has never had to deal with the pain of losing a loved one, has zero empathy, or is just one of “them”.
I can understand the parents fear of an older man with lollies around kids and even them being angry.
Yes they handled confronting him about what he was doing poorly, but parents worry about kids.
But wouldn't it be wonderful if we could all have neighbors as good as they turned out to be.
As a father / Grandfather I could understand his sorrow at loosing his family.
This story put a tear in my eye and put a lump in my throat about the size of a baseball.
Well done to the author, very well written story, thanks, .... 5*
Congratulations BG33, for the most beautiful, romantic and wonderful story. Definitely worth more than 5 star rating. 🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟
@KinPA - That's a very narrow minded and hurtful attitude to take. Perhaps they have dealt with the pain of losing a loved one and don't need a story to bring that pain back up? Perhaps they are looking for an escape from the troubles of reality and a depressing story like this doesn't help their situation?
Perhaps you should try a little empathy for your fellow readers who found this story not to their liking?
Thought I was sat down reading, didn't realise I was cutting up onions for something!
Truly excellent. Not much I can add that numerous others haven't already said. I will say that I wish neighbors were like this in real life. Unfortunately, that's not my experience. But thanks for posting. Its a real "tear jerker".
PTSD is not funny and destroys lives. If only people know what their actions can do to other people they may not hurt them. I am slightly surprised that Henry's PTSD did not trigger when he gave the children sweets (candy to some of you) as it would have reminded him of his children. The anniversary on the incident should have been a known trigger and should have been perceived. Hopefully his nightmares living with Selma will reduce over time. One rigger that may be an issue is seeing a crash on TV or a film. That one may need to be watched for.