The visuals you painted with words were quite remarkable, hot and very romantic! I truly sensed the passion between them! It was very arousing!
You could use a bit of coaching with paragraphing is all! Keep writing!!
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Anonymous11/10/08
Wanting a Massage
Would you give me a full body massage? I'd like that, and more...
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Anonymous09/30/15
Ummmm ...
Pretty similar to Chapter 1, haha. Identical, in fact.
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Anonymous02/22/17
Same story
This appears to be the same story as vol1. I assume there has been an error in the posting.
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Gift for my groom Ch. 02 reveiew.....
Loved it! It was wonderful! Honeymoon stories of romance are so nice!
Same as the first chapter
Seems to me.
Good story.
Is there a REAL chapter 2??
Excellent descriptions!!
The visuals you painted with words were quite remarkable, hot and very romantic! I truly sensed the passion between them! It was very arousing!
You could use a bit of coaching with paragraphing is all! Keep writing!!
Wanting a Massage
Would you give me a full body massage? I'd like that, and more...
Ummmm ...
Pretty similar to Chapter 1, haha. Identical, in fact.
Same story
This appears to be the same story as vol1. I assume there has been an error in the posting.
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