All Comments on 'Pick 3 Day 03'

I've read your other two in this series, and really enjoyed them, and was eager for the final instalment.

This one was decent, but I honestly felt like it was such a weak finish compared to the first two, and could really have benefited from a more descriptive ending. It began to feel like 'he did this, she came, the end', and didn't really engage me. The final box, and the final part should really have been, in my opinion, a more powerful finish than what it was, with more than just 'he fucked her'.

Don't take this as discouragement, but maybe next time take a bit more time to write, because this felt very rushed.

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