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These are great lines:
"Grief,
It cannot touch me here.
Nor sadness affect the day."
"Where anger flowed,
Now laughter runs."
"Another mental movie,
Where I do all the parts."
some of the others are good
in a way, I hate saying this about a poem about madness,
it is too rambly and could use a little more consistency.
Also madness nor sanity is something that is decided upon.
You, however, have a variety of choices. If you wish to have an internal dialogue, edit, decide what the ending is and write to support it. If you wish to ramble, do so with images. There is a lot that can be developed with some of these lines - I did not see that.
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