All Comments on 'Treading the Breakers'

You painted a beautiful picture of a location I carry

in my heart. It got out of focus when Alice and the

rabbit showed up. The other images are clear and it reads

well. You get a little more serious than I do with my

feet in the sand. That is a good thing.

with the feeling of misplacement the Alice verse insinuates into the poem, but still, its an excellent poem :)

lines are great.

~There are no footprints in the sea

no measure of forgiveness~

The rest of the poem has some great images as well.

~ see the sea~ didn't sit well with my ear...

and I hate to sound like " you know who"..but a few commas and periods would have given this a more dynamic feel.

All that being said...some great writing as always

Thank you

the need to say that I think the Alcie verse gives the poem a slight dream-like quality that helps it. Sorta like the waves blurring the shore line. All put together, a very solid poem.

this poem is more about Alice than the ocean....sort of like someone walking the edges of sanity....that line

" The fishes don't feel no pain"

really jars me....

Thanks....again....jd.