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by irishcatsmeow08/25/04

Like this....

poem very much. Especially this:

Even their obvious fight
strained his heart
with a desperate jealousy.

I like what you did with this poem, how you presented it...how you showed the man's state of mind by not only his actions but by his observations. Good job!

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by sandspike08/25/04

Irish is right

I think this is a great job. I missed his jealousy at
their fight the first time around. Maybe I haven't been
hurt enough to feel that way. This is once I'm glad
I read another's comment.

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by Maria239408/25/04

almost

made me cry, I can just feel the ache in his heart. very well done, albeit oh so sad

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