Another chapter and I loved it as much as the previous ones. This is probably the longest story I've read that has been consistently high quality and retains my attention.
Jack ask Beth to move into his bed. Debbie comes in crying, she needs to touch Jack to go to sleep. Jack lets Beth and Debbie work out the details. They will both share Jack and his bed. Polyamory or is it friends with benifits? Debbie, Beth and Amie (new) are talking a about the NEW Day Care operation for the addition out back. Beth talks to Jack about addinf Amie to his Harem. getting very interesting ...
Co-worker, girlfriend, other girlfriend, best friend's wife, and now possibly a business associate(Amie), his boss and if I had my way, Brenda, too! I am a strong believer that fantasies should be fantastic, and this series does not disappoint. Fuck everybody!
One other commenter asked when it becomes too much and I think I'm approaching that point. Love the characters, the sex is fantastic, most of the plot developments are realistic. But certain trends are ringing so untrue that to me they're detracting from the whole story.
So far the character of Cathy doesn't add anything except more fucking; besides being his best friend's wife, her character isn't necessary to move the story along and just makes the whole thing almost too far out there to be believable in the least.
The whole every-woman-wants-to-fuck-him scenario ignores human nature, and normally one of the most appealing things about your writing is your ability to describe personalities. No matter how he acts or what he says, within minutes someone is sucking or fucking him, without jealousy or even cattiness rearing their ugly heads. Really? I'm reminded of your Last Boy Scout series, with endless beauties throwing themselves at the protagonist at every turn and doing it together.
Finally, even the most healthy, virile male specimen out there can't come that quickly or that often. You've got Jack coming three times in a few minutes and never losing his wood. Even the pros need fluffers a a little time between takes.
All in all, I love your writing and all the perfect women populating the stories. I'm just having a hard time visualizing it all, so my interst is starting to wain.
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Anonymous06/30/15
This is a stretch
I have to agree and disagree with other readers. Yes, I think it stretches the limits of credibility to have so many women doing him with no jealousy or 'cattiness'. Especially Karen, who seems to have the most potential for being a full fledged bitch. His ability to remain erect and orgasm is far and away past even a young man in his prime. Over the top here. Cathy seems to be the protector. She seems to want to take up for the girls and help Jack make the living arrangements work. Gives advice and friendship. And she wants to fuck Jack, but just as a friend. She seems to be the motherly type, plus very sexual. Everything about this story is beyond believable, almost. The way you've written it makes the reader really want to believe it is real. Of course, all of it from the speed of the home remodel to his erections and ability to acquire almost any woman he desires all part of that. This is really great and I wish my life were similar in some ways. But the head count of the females in his life does not appeal to me. More than two women at a time in one place makes for stress in my experience.
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Oh why........oh why
did you make me wait 3 years for another chapter.. I enjoyed your writing..... WORTH THE WAIT
Better and better
Another chapter and I loved it as much as the previous ones. This is probably the longest story I've read that has been consistently high quality and retains my attention.
Good work and thanks,
Techsan
Loving the Time & Trouble Taken 2 Round Out Characters B4 U Present Them Carnally
Frailties & Strengths of the women, it's All There. The story is the stronger for it.
Beth moves in
Jack ask Beth to move into his bed. Debbie comes in crying, she needs to touch Jack to go to sleep. Jack lets Beth and Debbie work out the details. They will both share Jack and his bed. Polyamory or is it friends with benifits? Debbie, Beth and Amie (new) are talking a about the NEW Day Care operation for the addition out back. Beth talks to Jack about addinf Amie to his Harem. getting very interesting ...
I'm lovin' it!
Co-worker, girlfriend, other girlfriend, best friend's wife, and now possibly a business associate(Amie), his boss and if I had my way, Brenda, too! I am a strong believer that fantasies should be fantastic, and this series does not disappoint. Fuck everybody!
thanks for the inspiration
As a fellow Texan. I am enjoying
dear god..
at what point does it become so much!! so many people its ridiculous!
I realize it's a big fantasy, but...
One other commenter asked when it becomes too much and I think I'm approaching that point. Love the characters, the sex is fantastic, most of the plot developments are realistic. But certain trends are ringing so untrue that to me they're detracting from the whole story.
So far the character of Cathy doesn't add anything except more fucking; besides being his best friend's wife, her character isn't necessary to move the story along and just makes the whole thing almost too far out there to be believable in the least.
The whole every-woman-wants-to-fuck-him scenario ignores human nature, and normally one of the most appealing things about your writing is your ability to describe personalities. No matter how he acts or what he says, within minutes someone is sucking or fucking him, without jealousy or even cattiness rearing their ugly heads. Really? I'm reminded of your Last Boy Scout series, with endless beauties throwing themselves at the protagonist at every turn and doing it together.
Finally, even the most healthy, virile male specimen out there can't come that quickly or that often. You've got Jack coming three times in a few minutes and never losing his wood. Even the pros need fluffers a a little time between takes.
All in all, I love your writing and all the perfect women populating the stories. I'm just having a hard time visualizing it all, so my interst is starting to wain.
This is a stretch
I have to agree and disagree with other readers. Yes, I think it stretches the limits of credibility to have so many women doing him with no jealousy or 'cattiness'. Especially Karen, who seems to have the most potential for being a full fledged bitch. His ability to remain erect and orgasm is far and away past even a young man in his prime. Over the top here. Cathy seems to be the protector. She seems to want to take up for the girls and help Jack make the living arrangements work. Gives advice and friendship. And she wants to fuck Jack, but just as a friend. She seems to be the motherly type, plus very sexual. Everything about this story is beyond believable, almost. The way you've written it makes the reader really want to believe it is real. Of course, all of it from the speed of the home remodel to his erections and ability to acquire almost any woman he desires all part of that. This is really great and I wish my life were similar in some ways. But the head count of the females in his life does not appeal to me. More than two women at a time in one place makes for stress in my experience.
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