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haiku: the train

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by Anonymous

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by Tathagata09/10/04

Very

well done

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by Miss Oatlash09/10/04

Perhaps...

I'm a traditionalist, but I was taught that haiku and senyru require a certain syllabic rhythm of 5-7-5. That being said, I like the poem, I just wouldn't term it a 'haiku'.

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by 09/10/04

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I've been enjoying your haikus and this one is no exception.

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by Liar09/10/04

Your poem is reviewed

...in the New Poems thread over at the forum.

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by annaswirls09/11/04

thanku

this is a haiku and an awesome one at that

keep on writing!

Miss Oatlash, syllables do not really count, even the most traditional haiku poet will tell you this-- it is more than syllables, especially in English.

jthserra has a haiku series, you might check it out! I learned a lot from him too

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.p hp?id=125609

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by LeBroz06/23/08

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This poem was selected from Lit's archive of over 40,000 poems for inclusion in today's Archival Review.



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