All Comments on 'Burning Embers Ch. 01'

A good read, please continue.

I've got your love. You've got my love. We've got each others love. Tssss

I enjoyed that a lot and I'm going to coninue with part two straight away.

If I have one small quibble it's that you swap to the present tense for a paragraph or two near the beginning. It's not a huge problem, it's just a little jarring for the reader.

I look forward to seeing where you've taken the story in the chapters you've posted.

Really great storyline, the dialogue and setting is really creative and wonderful sex is incorporated too! You've quickly become one of my favorite writers here!